Sometimes

SOMETIMES

Sometimes we let go the things we love,

We make mistakes, we fall, we lie above.

Sometimes we try hard to make life perfect,

We realise, we apologize; after we regret.

Sometimes we feel life will fall into place,

We try harder than we could, just to catch the pace.

Sometimes we are helpless and tired of trying,

We sit back and hope, life will be worth living before dying.

Sometimes we smile when we are dead inside,

We force it, which leads to a misguide.

Sometimes we are fed up and want all this to end,

We break the barriers and become weak to bear life's bend.

Sometimes we want things so badly,

We make an effort to achieve it exactly.

Sometimes we are left with unaccomplished dreams,

We lay emotionless in tears with silent screams.

Reviews

[Mary Jo. Clare]

This poem is very emotional, tears are literally forming my eyes. Great job depicting the pain we all face at one time or another in our lives. Very impressive!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. It means a lot to me.

[barleygirl]

This is a convincing description of how mere fallible humans can sometimes manage to make things work out well, but sometimes not. This sounds like a reluctant acceptance of being human. This is a message to help us accept our mistakes & foibles. There's a nice understanding tone to it (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much for reading. It means a lot.

[Amada]

Sometimes I'm up
Sometimes I'm down
Sometimes I smile
Sometimes I frown
Depends on what I've done
Depends on who I've seen
Depends if you are nice
Depends if you are mean
Sometimes I'm clever
Sometimes I'm thick
Sometimes I endeavour
Sometimes I retreat
Depends on who I'm talking to
Depends on what I say
Depends on how I'm feeling
Depends if I'm too weak
Sometimes I'm happy
Sometimes I'm sad
Sometimes I want to change
Sometimes I want to be me
Depends on those around me
Depends upon the news
Depends if I'm helpless
Depends who else I could be

[Najam Us Saher]

Amazing! Thank you so much for this honest poem. I loved it. Also thank you for reading mine.

[Amada]

Always welcome.

[Eva]

I never thought I would find a poem I can relate to this much, especially that third stanza. I've always wanted to write something like this, but I could never find the words. You did an amazing job with this. One thing though, should the second line be "we make mistakes" instead?

[Najam Us Saher]

I'll just correct that. Thank you.
I am very happy to provide you something relatable to read. Thank you very much for your kind words.

[Lavi]

"Sometimes we let go the things we love,
We do mistakes, we fall, we lie above.
Sometimes we try hard to make life perfect,
We realise, we apologize; after we regret."
This stanza hooked me in from the start and the one I relate to the strongest. But this entire write is so powerful, so honest, and filled with emotion that I feel it in my chest. It's like the next best thing we'll get to telling a life story and you told it so well. It's just really good.
- Lavi

[Najam Us Saher]

Couldn't be more happy to hear this. Thank you very much. It means a lot.

[Vicky]

Congrats on winning silver in that contest!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much :)

[ElizaB]

As always, you reflect the torments of life so vividly.

To live is most certainly a mixture of light and dark; and your title 'sometimes' is absolutely perfect. For, there are times in our lives when it may seem harder than others, especially when faced with things that one cannot control. Yet, I feel a flicker of hope here, entwined with the tears and the silent screams; the broken barriers of which you describe symbolise strength. We must all be broken to repair, and it is unfortunate that we become broken to begin with.

However, as long as there are words all of us can share. This is a collective therapy, so thank you for sharing :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Truly said my friend. I am happy to read your in depth review and thoughts. Thank you so much.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

How true are these words. Many lines in this poem reflect my past so accurately. Lovely writing.

[Najam Us Saher]

Above all we rise after we fall. Thank you very much for reading this. It means a lot.

[KC]

very good. I loved this..

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much, it means a lot :)

[Abhishek Asthana]

You have described all emotions so poetically... Few of the guys are there in this world who are capable to face this every time... Beautifully written najam

[Najam Us Saher]

You are right. Thank you very much for reading :)