Right now it is actually raining at my place. hahaha.. Its an awessom work. Rain with pain. good one. feelings described and the flow is perfect.
Volume of cloud being burdurned with rain
is nothing compared to my heavy heart.
It is rain who have cried along with me since the start.
these lines are my favorite...
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
i agree with you
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I am really very happy that you liked it.
Thank you so much. ☺
7 Years Ago
I second the motion.. haha.. nice poem
7 Years Ago
Thank you for reading jazzymars. I am happy that you liked this poem.
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Of course, we are hear not just to post but to read also. Thanks also for accepting my request.
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Did you change your user name ?
It was 'Broken hearts'. Was it ?
7 Years Ago
I'm just new here. Started only yesterday. Who's 'broken hearts'?
7 Years Ago
Okay.
You mentioned that I accepted your request. So I got confused you being 'Broken hearts.. read moreOkay.
You mentioned that I accepted your request. So I got confused you being 'Broken hearts' That's why I asked you did you change your user name. I am mistaken. Sorry.
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I mean my friend request...
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You didn't send any.
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Yah i'm sure.
7 Years Ago
jazzymars you didnt. May be you sent but she is not your friend yet.
7 Years Ago
Nope, I only send friend request to anybody, i didn't ask other request... :D
Hey I am sorry I was mistaken, because I got a request from broken hearts this morning I was confuse.. read moreHey I am sorry I was mistaken, because I got a request from broken hearts this morning I was confused that it was you and thought maybe you have changed your user name.
You successfully projected the 'overcast' mood in this one Najam. It reminded me of the song 'Blue eyes crying in the rain' - performed by Willy Nelson.
Nice writing.
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7 Years Ago
Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts. I appreciate it.
The way you related rain with the things you are going on is just awesome. It's true that when you're alone, no one is there, something natural will be there with you always. Great work! I really really liked it
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
You are absolutely correct. Thank you very much for reading. ☺
I love how you paired rain and pain together! I actually have a started piece that I did a similar thing. This is such a great piece; keep up the amazing work!
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
I would like to read that. Please send me a red request for it.
Thank you so much. ☺
That's the most beautiful piece written by you. I know I said something like that before as well, but, this seems so deep, meaningful and so so beautiful! I admired it's beauty as much as I admire the rain. Such a true piece, this is called creativity and a masterpiece. I hope in the future I can also use my creative mind like you do. You've become one of my idols.
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7 Years Ago
Oh! I feel so honourned to hear that. Thank you very much ☺
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