When it rains

When it rains

A Poem by Najam Us Saher
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Only rain can understand my pain

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WHEN IT RAINS
Look, how gently the rain falls
merrily falling creating crystal bubbles.
Chilly wind makes me shiver 
and the voice of rain soothes me to sleep.
The essence of petrichor relieves me,
All this is a delight and bliss.
Still, it is hard to accept the fact
of you being away,
The sky cries along with me
and there is no more happiness. 
Water of the sky cannot fill the emptiness inside me,
I am alone looking at the waterfall,
I cry and rain cries along,
Rain and I are together,
Here we belong.
Volume of cloud being burdened with rain
is nothing compared to my heavy heart.
It is rain who has cried along with me since the start.

© 2017 Najam Us Saher


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Right now it is actually raining at my place. hahaha.. Its an awessom work. Rain with pain. good one. feelings described and the flow is perfect.

Volume of cloud being burdurned with rain
is nothing compared to my heavy heart.
It is rain who have cried along with me since the start.

these lines are my favorite...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

jazzymars

7 Years Ago

and i'm not 'broken hearts'... :D
Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

Hey I am sorry I was mistaken, because I got a request from broken hearts this morning I was confuse.. read more
jazzymars

7 Years Ago

no problem



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You successfully projected the 'overcast' mood in this one Najam. It reminded me of the song 'Blue eyes crying in the rain' - performed by Willy Nelson.
Nice writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts. I appreciate it.
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A nicely constructed poem.

Rain is synonymous with sadness as an image, and the repetition of it throughout your piece is representative of the inner melancholy you must feel.

I love the use of 'petrichor'. A lovely word and an even lovelier scent! A well written piece on longing for love.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

I am really happy that you liked this poem and understood the emotions for it. Thank you very much.
Rain always holds a lot of memories. A beautiful piece of poem from you

Posted 7 Years Ago


Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

I am really happy that you found it to be beautiful.
Thank you so much. :)
Heavy raining here in Mumbai..good to read this work in this climate..loved it

Posted 7 Years Ago


Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

Weather is the same here. ☺
I am really happy that you liked it.
I love the rain, and the way you wrote as you described it was just amazing with the most perfect flow in each line, I honestly love this one!

Thanks for sharing Najam! ^^

Posted 7 Years Ago


Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I mean it ☺
Joey Nizz

7 Years Ago

Your very much welcome :)
very well written...i loved each word because its written with elegance and pain as well...beautiful...keep writing, stay blessed.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Abraham George

7 Years Ago

stay blessed you both
Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reading Wajiha.
God bless you too Wajiha and Abraham.☺
Wajiha Nayeem

7 Years Ago

god bless uh both lovely ppl too..always a pleasure najam.
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The way you related rain with the things you are going on is just awesome. It's true that when you're alone, no one is there, something natural will be there with you always. Great work! I really really liked it

Posted 7 Years Ago


Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

You are absolutely correct. Thank you very much for reading. ☺
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7 Years Ago

you are welcome, my friend :)
I love how you paired rain and pain together! I actually have a started piece that I did a similar thing. This is such a great piece; keep up the amazing work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

I would like to read that. Please send me a red request for it.
Thank you so much. ☺
Broken Hearts

7 Years Ago

I will do once I finish it.
An emotional, soothing write Najam...
The rain is described so realistically and the emotions of the person as well...
Well done, keep it up!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reading. I am really happy that you found this poem to be soothing.
Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

No problem Najam :)
That's the most beautiful piece written by you. I know I said something like that before as well, but, this seems so deep, meaningful and so so beautiful! I admired it's beauty as much as I admire the rain. Such a true piece, this is called creativity and a masterpiece. I hope in the future I can also use my creative mind like you do. You've become one of my idols.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Anjali

7 Years Ago

You are very welcome!
jazzymars

7 Years Ago

nice comment anjali.. i second the motion. ;)
Anjali

7 Years Ago

Ok....😆😆😆

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