When it rains

Only rain can understand my pain

WHEN IT RAINS

Look, how gently the rain falls

merrily falling creating crystal bubbles.

Chilly wind makes me shiver 

and the voice of rain soothes me to sleep.

The essence of petrichor relieves me,

All this is a delight and bliss.

Still, it is hard to accept the fact

of you being away,

The sky cries along with me

and there is no more happiness. 

Water of the sky cannot fill the emptiness inside me,

I am alone looking at the waterfall,

I cry and rain cries along,

Rain and I are together,

Here we belong.

Volume of cloud being burdened with rain

is nothing compared to my heavy heart.

It is rain who has cried along with me since the start.

Reviews

[heartspeaks]

Right now it is actually raining at my place. hahaha.. Its an awessom work. Rain with pain. good one. feelings described and the flow is perfect.

Volume of cloud being burdurned with rain
is nothing compared to my heavy heart.
It is rain who have cried along with me since the start.

these lines are my favorite...

[Abraham George]

i agree with you

[Najam Us Saher]

I am really very happy that you liked it.
Thank you so much. ☺

[jazzymars]

I second the motion.. haha.. nice poem

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you for reading jazzymars. I am happy that you liked this poem.

[jazzymars]

Of course, we are hear not just to post but to read also. Thanks also for accepting my request.

[Najam Us Saher]

Did you change your user name ?
It was 'Broken hearts'. Was it ?

[jazzymars]

I'm just new here. Started only yesterday. Who's 'broken hearts'?

[Najam Us Saher]

Okay.
You mentioned that I accepted your request. So I got confused you being 'Broken hearts' That's why I asked you did you change your user name. I am mistaken. Sorry.

[jazzymars]

I mean my friend request...

[Najam Us Saher]

You didn't send any.

[jazzymars]

Yah i'm sure.

[Abraham George]

jazzymars you didnt. May be you sent but she is not your friend yet.

[jazzymars]

Nope, I only send friend request to anybody, i didn't ask other request... :D

[jazzymars]

and i'm not 'broken hearts'... :D

[Najam Us Saher]

Hey I am sorry I was mistaken, because I got a request from broken hearts this morning I was confused that it was you and thought maybe you have changed your user name.

[jazzymars]

no problem

[¿]

I felt the first 5 lines last night. Exactly like this. The chilly wind, bubbles! Just another thing was also falling and that's ice chunks! So grateful to you to help me read these wonderful rainies!

[Najam Us Saher]

The moment you said that you love reading poems on rains, I felt that I must send you some of mine. Thank you very much for reading :)

[Anshuman Aryav]

Beautiful as usual..
Once again u made me articulate ' u r gr8 but never stop ...keep doing these gr8 things'..
Keep writing..

[Najam Us Saher]

Oh! Thank you so much for such kind words. 😀

[Anshuman Aryav]

You are welcome..

[Elephant]

Very beautifully written. Amazing use of words.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. It means a lot :)

[Elephant]

You are very welcome

[SZHZIA]

It is nice attempt from you to tell your pain through imaging rain. It also comes into the category of emotional piece life your other poems. well done. Thanks for sharing.

Best
Szhzia

[Najam Us Saher]

I am really happy that you found this poem nice, it really means a lot :)

[SZHZIA]

It is my pleasure to read your poem. and you are welcome. :-)

[AcasualPawn]

Really good poem, although i feel dripping of rain soothing, it makes me feel sleepy.....

[Najam Us Saher]

I love rain too. I love to be asleep at the sound of rain. Thank you so much ☺

[MaximumFlight]

So sad, and somehow I can relate to the feeling you express in the words. Wonderful job :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. You've made my day :D

[William Liston]

I love the comparisons in this piece, with the weather reflecting the speaker's sorrow. This poem has an overall nice flow to it, and the descriptions, being both simple and evocative, are definitely relatable and melancholic.
I enjoyed the personification of rain in how it showed rain to be a source of comfort. I really love rain myself, so I could definitely relate.
Well done!

- William Liston

[Najam Us Saher]

I am really glad that you understood the emotions behind it.
Thank you very much.

[z.chéri]

'Volume of cloud being burdened with rain
is nothing compared to my heavy heart.
It is rain who has cried along with me since the start.'

I love this! I love poems to do with rain! Aw so good. Keep writing!

[Najam Us Saher]

Widely elated to know that you liked it. Thank you very much ☺

[Coyote Poetry]

The rain and tears. Happens often in a life. I liked the emotions and story told in the worlds. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Najam Us Saher]

I thank you so much for reading. I am glad that you liked it. ☺

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome my friend.

[Sikandar Khan]

Beautiful Presentation of Rain..........

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much....