I accept the fact that life is worth living...These are just feelings what I am going through...
It's my frustration on life...I still believe life has something good for me..I really appreciate and value my life but sometimes I feel such...
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Ah!! This is just beautiful! Simple words, but clear, concise, and relatable. I am typically drawn to language and phrasing first, followed by emotion second, but emotion can often overwhelm above all, and I felt that frustration from the inconsistency of life very strongly. The way in which this was wrote can appeal and be understood by many besides the content which can connect to many. The back and forth like a raging but hopeful tide on the wish to live happily while having a losing hand is employed so perfectly--I cannot stress how delighted I am with this simple but heartfelt and powerful piece.
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
*was written
I forgot to mention that I liked how this was a poem to life as if it were a fic.. read more*was written
I forgot to mention that I liked how this was a poem to life as if it were a fickle lover.
5 Years Ago
I thank you very much for such appreciation and honest feedback for this poem. Every word means a lo.. read moreI thank you very much for such appreciation and honest feedback for this poem. Every word means a lot to me and I am overwhelmed to read your review.
Thank you very much.
As a young man I believed in nothing beyond this world, this single lifetime. At 24 I almost drowned and had an NDE. Every day since then I've known the real illusion is this world-- it is but a dream, one of very many we each have I suspect, and like our dreams at night, they are mostly forgotten when we go to the next life, the next dream. But Najam, karma is also real, so what we do in any dream/life is very, very important.
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
I agree with you. I am happy and contended in my life today :)
'You steal the breath of those who struggle to be alive,
And don't grant death to those who don't want to live.
You are a bitter truth,
Now death seems a beautiful lie'
From this beautiful piece ... I found these lines (the ones above) in particular very good.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you so much. I am overwhelmed to know that you liked it, I appreciate it.
I thing that life is a combination of happiness and grief. We should have patience in both situations because it is not use to be worry all time in our life. It also causes of rising uneasiness in our state of mined which leads the destruction many good things. as a poem it is very nice. Well done. Thanks for sharing.
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Szhzia
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
You are absolutely right, it is only because of grief that we can appreciate happiness. You have my .. read moreYou are absolutely right, it is only because of grief that we can appreciate happiness. You have my greatest gratitude.
Frustrations are here and there throughout life... your personification is skillful. There were also times when I feel that death is tempting - yet I know it's a lie. My heart solidified so I wouldn't feel the pain - it was constantly there, torturing me every day. This is an amazing piece and thank you for sharing!
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
I thank you so much for reading.... :)
I am really happy to know that you liked it..
Who kept on repeated(ING) her mistakes and never failed to admit them.
Wow ! Najam you never fail to surprise me. This is amazing. the words used are so creative and convey the message apt.
These lines just stole the show... wonderful
You are a bitter truth,
Now death seems a beautiful lie,
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Your words always bring a smile on my face....I thank you so much for reading my works... ☺
I understand what this says. Life is... Complicated, frustrating, and somehow, it doesn't pull any punches. I sometimes forget this, I don't know if anyone else does, but life is a pain to me, but I know it's sometimes not so unfair. If you've read any of my poems or stories, life being unfair is a common theme. Life is unfair, but nothing is fair. You just have to try your hardest to forget that sometimes everything will suck, but not everything will later.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
I am glad that you have hope that everything will be better because at times one loses that hope too.. read moreI am glad that you have hope that everything will be better because at times one loses that hope too....
I will surely read your works. Thank you so much for reading mine :)
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