Paper boat

Personification

PAPER BOAT

Setting out for a journey,

Long way I have to go.

For I am a paper boat,

Floating in the stream of darkness.

Eager and curious for the destiny to unfold,

I am all stiff in pride,

For I am a paper boat,

I am setting out for a ride.

Cold wind pushes me hard to move forward,

And I wait for someone to notice me,

I feel like I am invisible,

Only this stream around me I see.

Drenched in my own feelings,

I float along the stream,

Trembling and falling but I move along with the wind.

The words in me are fading,

For it is a message to the one who notice me,

Gliding across the way,

I was unnoticed but existed among them.

My pride is gone,

I am no more stiff,

I am dripping wet and the rain drowns me,

Finally, I am noticed after a long journey.

But when I am picked up to read,

My words are blurred and I am not what I used to be.

I am now a mere piece of paper,

Drenched in the rain and utterly useless,

I am torn and ruined being all by myself. 

I lay down there thinking,

When I was in my true form I had no one to notice,

When I am at my worst I am blamed and lying unnoticed.

Reviews

[Mr.Writer]

Omg Najam, you took something pretty simple, a paper boat and totally changed the view of it! To something we couldn't ever think about and gave it human like personality and emotions.. Hats off to you Najam!
Keep it up

[Najam Us Saher]

Oh thank you so much....I am really happy to know that you liked it... ☺

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)

[Sofia]

A unique topic..i liked it...i loved the rhyming too..thnx for sharing..people only notice when we are at are worst...😃 A great poem.. :)

[Najam Us Saher]

I thank you so much for reading ☺

[Sofia]

My pleasure!!😃

[Rassoul]

"I am dripping wet and the rain drowns me,
Finally, I am noticed after a long journey."

Well written poem, Najam!
I enjoyed.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much for taking the time to read this. I appreciate your kind words :)

[heartspeaks]

what a great write...amazing...poetry wise and the emotion till the end flowed perfect...amazing imagination...Well done.. your works inspire me to write..the unimaginable

[Najam Us Saher]

Oh thank you very much........I am really very happy to know that you liked it :)

[Hope]

A nice personification indeed Najam:)
I love your poems as they are meaningful and creative.
People really notice when sth is wrong but rarely notice when we have done sth nice.
Great work dear Najam!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much....You made me very happy with your kind words :)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

that's a wonderful poem...creative and really imaginative!...i loved it.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much..... ☺

[Farhan Shaikh]

That's wonderful very good work saher unique poem and the way it ends is just awesome

[Najam Us Saher]

I am really very happy to know that you liked it ☺

[Sikandar Khan]

Simple Wonderwull Personification........

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much for reading...I am glad that you found it to be wonderful... :)

[Surya]

That's what people do see...I loved it...:)

[Najam Us Saher]

Yes you are right people just complain us when we change... Thank you so much :)

[Surya]

It's my plsr and You're welcome...:)

[Abhishek Asthana]

i really like the way you have ended this one...its awesome... very well portrayed... tells about different phases... again a very good work najam :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much for your kind words.... ☺