Morning star

Rising sun brings a hope

MORNING STAR

She hides her pain really well,

When her happiness turns to sadness you can never tell.

She has seen worse days,

Her life changed, her mind in a state of haze.

She lost all her hope,

Her extreme emotions she couldn't cope,

She was left alone all by herself,

No one knows her, than myself.

She suffered in silence,

There was no one for her guidance,

She was blamed by all,

She blamed herself for her fall.

She was dead inside,

She felt alone to have no one by her side.

She has spent miserable days,

Till today she seeks a perfect place.

Every good thing in her was forgotten,

Even she forgot them,

She started to hate herself,

In her melancholy she was engulfed.

Her smile is lost,

Her heart is still covered in frost,

Her life is messed and shabby,

She just wants to be happy.

She still hopes for the better days,

She hopes she will fit in a perfect place.

She smiles even when her heart is in scars,

Each day she rises up in hope;

For her name means morning star. 

Reviews

[Farhan Shaikh]

This is awesome poem saher, I feel sorry for myself to read it too late..well penned

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. Don't be sorry, be happy with the fact that you didn't miss it out. ☺

[yuhee]

"She smiles even when her heart is in scars,
Each day she rises up in hope;
For her name means morning star. " Love these lines. Whatever happens always move forward and no matter how many times you stumbled, keep standing up. An inspiring poem. Thanks for sharing.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. I am feeling truly happy to know that you liked it ☺

[wordman]

heart felt and a sad touching write,i could feel your pain,hear your cries

[Najam Us Saher]

That's what I wanted my readers to feel. I am glad that I could do it. Thank you so much sir ☺

[AshlynnStyx]

Well...this one actually hit me hard. Why? Because I suffer the same way. Amazing job.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. I am glad to know that it was relatable. ☺

[Mr.Writer]

A beautiful, emotional, engaging poem... It brought me to tears kinda at the end... Great job!
I felt like she had hope of a miracle after all the sufferings she's had. Beautiful

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. I appreciate it. ☺

[Mr.Writer]

No problem!

[Giulia King]

I love the end so much. Great job :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much ☺ Feeling truly happy to know that you liked it.

[Sikandar Khan]

aray itni sad peom na likha kro mujhay kuch zyada he sad feelings aaanay lag jati ha

[Najam Us Saher]

Acha...Thank you so much

[Sikandar Khan]

Han G Yeh Wasay Tmnay Awe Likhi HA YA Kisi Gam Mein Mubtala Hogae Ho....?

[Najam Us Saher]

Chalte rehte hai kuch na kuch....

[Sikandar Khan]

Ab Kia HOgya HA Itni Udaasi Q HA.........

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Interesting, since "morning star" is really the translation of your name in English. I liked how you placed it at the end of the poem, it brings a kind of finality and conclusion to the whole thing.
Hope is the main thing, I think, which keeps us going even though nothing seems alright at the time...
I liked this piece and the emotions in it :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much and yes that's the meaning of my name. I am feeling truly happy to know that you liked it. I'll just correct the errors. Thank you for pointing it out and I really don't mind when anyone points out my errors ☺

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Najam. I edited my review too :)
It was a pleasure reading this :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Oh! Thank you 😊

[Dr. YumnaKay]

No problem, my friend :)

[Joey Nizz]

wow, i love hoe it ended, this kind of reminded me of someone.. anyways thanks for sharing this was a really good piece to read this morning.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much for your kind words. I appreciate it ☺

[Joey Nizz]

Your welcome :)

[Surya]

I have seen such, that is the most critical stage I can say but there are some who can help them out from it, but it's upto us whether to listem them or be on our path....any ways your poem shown a visual how someone feels in grieve...I liked it..

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. I am glad to know that you liked it ☺