You

I wrote this for a contest

YOU

 

When I first opened my eyes I saw you,

You are gone when I really need you. 

Reviews

[Anjali]

It is so ironical! Wow! And this is so true too! Beautiful! Keep surprising us with creations like this!

[Najam Us Saher]

Sure, stay with me always to read and appreciate them. :)

[Anjali]

Absolutely!

[sette]

i like the poem very meaningful

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. It means a lot.

[sette]

you are welcome

[Aanchal Bharara]

Nicely written story in a line.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much :)

[Abraham George]

there is nothing to replace the place of mother. You shown that in these simple line with beautiful meaning

[Najam Us Saher]

You are right....Thank you so much for reading this...

[Poeticme]

This has depth and beauty, thanks for sharing....Have you ever tried your hand at haikus??☺

Poeticme

[Najam Us Saher]

No I haven't. Thank you so much for your visit. I appreciate it ☺

[Najam Us Saher]

I have written two haikus, saw this comment and I felt like letting you know.
Oh! Such sweet music,
It is a musical doll,
But trapped in a box.

I am not living,
There is just my presence here,
Now, I just exist.

[CAPOLAVORO]

That picture. Ohhh it limits my imagination. I truly respect your own perception and owning your own thought but for readers. Kind a bit limited in that sense.

[Najam Us Saher]

I get it. I wrote this for one line story contest. Thank you for sharing your views :)

[CAPOLAVORO]

I get it now. :)

[OhSnapShley]

I dont think the wording is the best for it being so short. I get the context, just not my favorite.

[Najam Us Saher]

Okay. I wrote this for a one line story contest. Thank you for reading.

[Sonakshi Arora]

Two lines that express so much! We never realise the importance of a moment or a thing until we lose it. Thank you for sharing! I am a fan of your works :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Oh thank you so much :) I am feeling very happy to know that you like what I write.

[JoceMaria]

Such power in such little words. When I liked at the image I felt so much love and yet sadness to

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you :)

[wordman]

such a sad write,lovely image

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much feeling really happy to know that you liked it. :)

[wordman]

my pleasure