You Left Me alone

Its a description of a girl's feelings when her lover dies.. Its not actually a poem.. They are the words which directly comes from my heart..

Everytime I thinks about you

I just feels that you are still with me,

I feels like you are still holding my hand,

I feels like you are touching my soul,

I feels like I'm still in your arms,

I feels like.....

I feels like you are looking at me

with love in your eyes,

Just like you used to look before..

But when I used to come to the present,

I just realises that this is just an imagination of mine,

that this is just a perception of mine.. without any reality

Yes.. without any reality..

Because you are no more with me

Infact you are no more with anyone 

Because you are no more in this world

You left me alone..

You know you were my life

My life starts with you and ends with you only

You know you meant everything to me

I can't even imagine my life without you

But you bounded me to live this life without you

You bounded me to take breath without you

You bounded me to do everything without you

which we had planned to do together,

because

You left me alone..

We used to be so happy with each other,

You had make me feel that I'm so special,

You remember what you had promised me,

that you will not allow a single drop to shed from my eyes

but you had left me in a pond of tears..

I want you to hug me, to take me in your arms

I want to feel that warmth,

I want to be feel protected..

You had promised that you wii be there with me

and now.. and now..

You left me alone..

This is cheating,

You had promised me that you will never hide anything from me,

That you will tell me each and everything,

But you don't even made me realize your pain

You had told me that we are life partners

But you haven't make me partner in your pain only..

Oh God, why were you so cruel to me,

Why had you snatched my love from me

Why had you bounded me to live this life without my love,

For heaven's sake please send my love back,

I can't live without him, I can't bear this pain,

My life left me alone,

My love you..

You left me alone...:(

......You left me alone... :(

Author's Note

Really close to my heart

Reviews

[Sreenath]

hi naina, no offense i just wanted to know why are you using plural " feels, realises,thinks etc". it should be better if you use singular and never use coz.... because its a common mistake we indians do while writing... any way awesome theme .. enjoyed reading it :) peace do check rhyme schemes too :)

[Naina]

I'll take care of what you said..... Thanks a lot for reading and thank you very much for reviewing.... and I'll improve myself with time.. and this rhyming is a little difficult task for me because m interested in stories, and, poems if only they are prose poems... But yepp I'll definately try.... Once again thanks a lot and please keep reviewing..:)

[Naina]

n I used plurals because m saying that "mujhe realise hota hai" for realises and "mujhe feel hota hai" for "feels" and for using "coz" m sorry..:)

[Sreenath]

sahi hai par you now jab tum professional bante ho to yea galtiyan apne ap a jayenge i know that you know but just wanted to mae ure peace keep smiling naina :)

[Naina]

thanks a lot for suggesting... keep reviewing..:)

[nazia]

Heartbreaks bring so much of pain and misery but on the other hand they make us stronger and wiser.. A well expressed emotional piece Naina :)

[Naina]

Thanks a lot Nazia.. And yaa you are right..:)

[Avanthika]

hai naina i do agree with shree, theres really no need to use plural thinks, feels ...so just take care of that, you will improve yourself.

[Naina]

Thank you very much Avanthika for reviewing and yaa I'll take care of that in future..... :))

[Anahat]

an emotional write..but singulars would make more sense...like feel realise...
I've read your review comment on shree's review...like you said "jo feel hota hai"...can be better expressed with "feel"...I hope you take care :)

[Naina]

Thank a lot for reading Anahat..... I'm glad that you have reviewed my writing..... Thanks for the suggestions and I'll surely take care to not repeat my mistakes..:))

[Anahat]

My pleasure :)

[Naina]

............:)

[Avinash]

This is beautiful. A great ode to a loss which can not be returned. Thanks a lot for sharing.

[Naina]

Thanks for reading.....:)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Awww.. sweetie this so very emotional.. left my heart aching for you.. wonderful heartfelt words.. some typos and grammatical errors.. but its fine because it is from heart ;) ★takecare★

~Sophy

[Naina]

Thanks a lot for reading.. N I'm glad you liked it...sometimes in life such situation arises when you seriously don't understand that exactly what had happened with you and the only option left with you is to accept what had happned and just fight back.. Afterall life is all about fighting back not just giving away... Once again thanks a lot for liking it sweetheart..:)

[Saddam]

Of course it is close to my heart.
Mere paas jyada kuch kehne ko nahi hai, maine ek story likhi hai SHORT LOVE STORY, ye usi prakar ki poetry hai. Mai isi pyar me bharosa karta hu.
HAT OFF FOR YOU DEAR POET. GREAT WRITE.

[Naina]

Thank you ssadd for such a wonderful review... I'm glad you liked it....N your story will be very good, i guess so... Keep reviewing and please keep writing..:)

[priya]

its a heartfelt poem.... but I would like to point out certain mistakes which would make this poem even more beautiful... In the first stanza every line Starting with "I" should start with "it"...in certain places instead of "make", it should be "made"...but overall it really touched my heart... :)

[Naina]

Thank you very much priya.... and that I is used because I'm saying this poem and what I exactly feel at that moment I had written that.. n that "made" mistake I haven't noticed so really Thanks a lot for that... N please keep reviewing so that I can improve myself... :)

[priya]

with pleasure Naina... :) always happy to help.. :)

[Naina]

........:)

[anne]

I can feel the personal touch in this poem.......its really difficult to live without your beloved ones.....its a beautiful write......

[Naina]

thank you very much anne for reading.. Its really nice to hear from you :)

[Naina]

N you are right that its really difficult to live without your beloved ones.. :(

[Prabha Salimath]

Really heart touching poem Naina beautifully described the mourning in words...

[Naina]

thanks a lot prabha for reading.. :)

[Prabha Salimath]

you are welcome....