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I step out onto the street,

my pocket watch in hand.

Gold and shimmering,

4 'o clock.

A gaggle of women chuckle by,

I tilt my hat.

I glance up at the building above.

A tall building with creamy brick.

I see your face in the pane above.

Eyes to ground. Eyes to ground.

Face up, I head for the door.

Click click my shoes on the floor.

I have arrived,

now what is my fate?

What.. is.. my.. fate.

Reviews

[ron]

Very thought provoking poem. Very well delivered.

[K.E. Henderson]

Not going to lie... A gaggle of women ... Probably my favorite word pairing of all time and the ending was strong. I felt it in my bones.

[Nikki]

lol thank you, reference to cackling hens-my chorus teacher used to make us sing this song for our warm up and she'd told us it was about women in a beauty shop. ;) lol thank you for your kind review :)

[Eleanor]

Nicely written :)
Short but a rich piece of writing

[Nikki]

Thank you ma'mm :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

nicely done!!
lovely little descriptive poem!
i liked it!!!
:)

[Nikki]

Thanks so much :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome.....:) :)

[jennifer little]

nice poem great work keep up the good work

[Nikki]

thanks for the review.

[jennifer little]

ur welcome

[Girl With A Pen]

Even though it is told in first person, you can feel yourself right there with the character. Amazing.

[Nikki]

Very kind of you, thank you for journeying with me. :)

[DragonX]

So very subtle but so powerful at the same time. You can live and breathe it.

[Laura Lynn]

I can see this seen and hear the quiet possibly rainy night. It is a beautiful and classic picture. It has that maleness about it that a woman feels so drawn to. The man is surely handsome, dapper, dashing, etc. Clearly that

[Nikki]

Thank you very much. :) Appreciate it.