Innocent Temptations.

Are we growing up or just going down?

 

In this closet we share

This pitch black blanket

Hides only our desperation

 

These hands groping, caressing

As our lips lock between gasps of air

I’m crying, I’m panting, I’m stroking

 

Sounds of intimacy, growing and growing

The threat of an oncoming bomb evident

That blind ‘I love you’ stumbling inside

 

            I stop, you stop and we stare at one another

            You notice my tears, I notice your pain

            Trembling lips whispering out doubts

 

Taking back your hands you sigh

Taking back control you let go

Taking back time you explain

 

            To hear your worries
            To hear your truth

            It is what I want

 

In this closet: we are hiding

In this darkness: we are safe

In this moment: we are at peace

Author's Note

I wanna scream I love you at the top of my lungs but I'm afraid that someone else will hear me

Reviews

[fireblossom]

I like the fact that you pulled this poem back from the edge...from the rush of passion to something more meaningful. Nice writing.

[LatoyaEvans]

T his was beautiful and passionate, your emotions came through clearly. Thanks for sharing.

[DoucheFuck;;]

I absolutely loved this.

The repetition was very well done, and the imagery was superb. I could really feel the emotion, and tension coming out of it.

Well done!
=]

[Michael X]

wow. natasha, such a painted depiction of desirous affection, your talent certainly filled the cup with
skillful, overflowing emotions that cant help but capture the reader in the moment.
I loved this writing, its poetry written to height, where art and insight collide as an explosion
of expression with fine, sincere, and touching detail, I loved this, I agree, Bravo!!!

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This was great Natasha!! I loved your descriptions and passion. It's so emotional. So vivid.
I love this piece! It's my favorite from you!
I'm snapping my fingers in applause!

[...]

I think this is my favorite poem of yours. ^^

[Dietrich von Crowe]

Clever use of parallelism in that last two non-indented stanzas.

[Jacqueline]

I'm assuming this has at least something to do with your dream?
Well, I must say.
I love this.
The repetition is really effective.
I really love the trios of lines (or triplets?)
lmao
No, but excellent job.