Laughing Frowns

Laughing Frowns

A Poem by N.Sevilla

Happy Sadness.
That's what I call it.
A dash of sadness;
Of happiness: just a bit.
Put it together and you have
A smiling frown.
Feeling high with your
Spirits down.
Enjoy the darkness within.
Feeling the warmth when
The sun is dim.
Feeling the burning heat
Of rain.
Enjoy the wonderous,
Fantastical pain.

© 2010 N.Sevilla


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there are countless shades of gray to be thankful for, let's face it..


Posted 11 Years Ago


The flow and rhythm is a little of in this one, could be your choice of line-breaks but I did enjoy reading this one. I liked the subtle rhyming of your poem although after "frown" and "down" the rhyme pattern is thrown off by having two non-rhyming lines before the rhyming pattern of every other line picks up again. I can see that you might have tried rhyming "within" and "dim" but those are kind of a stretch and it would still throw off the every other line rhyme by having it right after "down". Good poem though, plenty of potential that is filled to the brim with metaphor and emotion. Really good job! I love the last line by the way, very expressive!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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I've had this account for several years and I am finally coming back to my writing roots. It's been a joy to write again and look back on my poetry from 10 years ago and see the changes in my life. .. more..

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