Whisper of a Thrill

why does my heart pound so hard when thinking of you? causing me to choke on the air itself.

A glance at a still

A whisper of a thrill

A touch she can feel

And a wound that can heal

 

A heart pounding in lust

A girl wanting to trust

A beautiful face

And an unsteady pace

 

A glimpse of a past

A promise to last

A showing of

And a wish for love

 

A heart is singing

A feeling of  being

A sense of affinity

And a kiss of eternity

 

 

 

Author's Note

Hmmm, could be fun.

Reviews

[i.am.the.sun.]

if only.
for the last line of the second stanza, i know it would disrupt the A A A And start of all the lines but i think it would be worth substituting "And" with "At". as if she's wanting to trust a beautiful face at an unsteady pace - wanting to be overwhelmed with it, slightly out of control, stepping out of her confort zone and ignoring second thoughts.

[Antonio Valentino]

very, very, sweet and romantic. I'm thinking this is more then, a whisper.

Much enjoyed.
Antonio :)

[Wolfwind Words]

A beautiful piece of poetry. Intimating romance and the heat of a special moment, your words capture image and emotions well. Twould be perfect in my opinion save for the first word on the third stanza is missing a "n" :)

Great Ink!
Wolfie

[Jared Hughes]

Very good poem I especially like the lines:
A glace of a past
A promise to last
A showing of
And a wish for love

The word glace is what caught my attention. I don't think I've ever heard that word before

Good Job!

Jared Bryant

[Brandon]

Nicely done. Short and sweet.

[Shelby Baker]

OH MY GOD!
haha
love it!!
simply!!