Breathe For Me

No idea where this came from.

Ocean eyes,

Endless,

Briming with intensity,

Perfect but not flawless.

 

Limbs of steel,

Only iron and wine,

Pimp it through my veins,

Don't let me decline.

 

Breathe for me,

For me stay strong,

But don't wake me from my slumber,

Keep me here where I belong.

 

Don't let me go,

I'm still near,

Just merely sleeping,

Don't leave me here.

 

Watch over me,

With those deep-sea eyes,

Show me love,

Hopefully my pulse replies.

 

Author's Note

So, I have no idea where this came from. I want to hear what you think it's about.

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

My first thought was someone in a coma that was inside an iron lung so they could continue to breath.

My second thought was of someone who is lost in the world of alcoholism, and drugs. Torn between the illusions created by the drugs and the love given by the oceans eyes.

Some very interesting images come out in this. Seems like each stanza take life of it's own, twisting and turning the thoughts in a new direction as one reads down it.

A deep pondering thinker.
Thanks for the share!
Infinity's Shadow

[An owl on the moon]

Oh, this is so beautiful and moving! Love the depth... sense of despair with hope, sense of weakness but strong will, sense of love that never ends like the endless waves of the sea... Amazing...

[JLMatthews]

It seems to be like a spirit still bound to their mortal love, hoping to come back so they can stay with that person. I liked the rhyming- it seemed to be a subtle rhyming thing, and its nice.

[George Love]

You took some random thoughts and ran with them, turned them into a nicework of poetry. Well done!

[Ralphy]

This is sweet, there are some different phrases I can say I never heard but the wrtiing was Delicious and the close is what ignited my thrist.

Watch over me,

With those deep-sea eyes,

Show me love,

Hopefully my pulse replies.

nice write

[Aki]

It's sad but in a romantic way. But, I liked it. I'm sure in some way people can relate.

Aki [Sakbi]

[CLUTZ]

maybe sometimes you feel like you're suffocating or you feel like you can't stand on your own without a certain person. is that helpful, if its not i'm sorry. i can't deal with my problems most of the time. your poem was good, and i enjoyed it.