My Marionette Girl

See if you can guess what this is really about.

The broken strings from my hands itch.

Fix my broken strings with a simple stitch.

Kiss me, Love me, Hate me, Kill me.

My face is fire from this painted smile.

Mend my strings and stay awhile.

Kiss me, Love me, Hate me, Kill me.

Toy with me and play with my love.

Your brilliant sadistic eyes shine from above.

Kiss me, Love me, Hate me, Kill me.

As you force my silly dance on your little stage. 

Then when you tire of me put me in my cage.

Kiss me, Love me, Hate me, Kill me.

It doesn't matter if you forget I'm there.

Because after a month I'll still think you care.

Kiss me, Love me, Hate me, Kill me.

If you decide to return.

My wooden joints may be a little stubborn

Kiss me, Love me, Hate me, Kill me.

But you can fix me up.

I just need a little warmup.

Kiss me, Love me, Hate me, Kill me.

You seem to care enough to enthrawl.

But I want you to love me for more than just a doll.

Kiss me, Love me, Hate me, Kill me.

Because I care for you more than you could know.

And right now I'm not willing to let go.

Kiss me, Love me, Hate me, Kill me.

Author's Note

Let me know what you thought OF THE POEM. Thank you.

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

Hmmmm...I would guess that this has something to do with a view of God or perhaps a drug addiction? Those were the two things that came to mind as I read this piece.
A third guess would be a childs resentment for a mother or father, who views the child as an object of financial gain, rather then a person.
Yet, again...a fourth guess could be as simple as the view point from a ragedy ann type doll. Or it might be a pet of some sort. But the repetative chanting through out leads towards the first three guesses more.

I really liked the layout of it, and the rhyming scheme you used had a wonderful flow to it. The repeating line through sounded in my mind of a whispered voice in the back ground. It was a nice effect.

Wait! Is it writen from the mind of a prostitute towards her pimp?

Anyways. I enjoyed it alot. thanks for the share!
Infinity's Shadow

[Ralphy]

I loved the poetry but what I thought of... was abuse, as in a relationship and the doll would wait endless time because because she thought pain was her love.

[JLMatthews]

Its about being in love with someone whose just toying with you. I really like the rhyming of it (I'm a sucker for rhyming poems) and I like the undertones on like the stream-of-consciouesness kind of thing. It's cool.

[George Love]

The poetic work is very good. I like the layout, the counterpoint of the subdued verse and the form. Very good work.

[Belinda Rice]

things in life can be hard but no one should ever feel like they hated wanted to be killed or anything cause your words in here are powerful you speake right from within the soul...you bring a part out in you that You felt need to be put out to the world and thats great to exspress your feelings...God has a way for all of us to have the special ability to bring out the best in us to eather have something to go back on in life to read agin or to show us what we are doing wrong in life but always know that he forgives us for our sin no matter what as long as you except him in your life...great work you have done here I really like this one keep up the great writing

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Sorry to add a double comment. My browswer is going crazy with the bugs on this website and will only allow me to type one character without getting a bug and having to debug it.

At any rate, I think that I know what this was about. Do I win a cupie doll? What is the prize? Can I just bluff my way through this and not mention my guess? I think that I got it. Love can be so cruel especially to a sweet and giving heart.

Peace and love,
Gabe

[The Archangel Gabriel]

I find this piece to be simply wonderful. You send me some of the best reads, and I am sorry that I don't have more time to read such works. This one won my heart all over again.

Luv,
Gabe

[Nana Carmine]

I am guessing this is about Eric, but I'm not a hundred present sure. You did a really good job with this poem though. The lines in between each stanza really help the flow. It flows together beautifully and your use of vocabulary really help with this. I think this is one of my favorites from you. Great job, beautifully stated.

~Nana Carmine

[Travis Wilson]

Hmmmmm..... I have a pretty good idea of what this is about. knowing that you talk about it a bit in front of me

Any ways the poem....
I enjoyed it quite well, it is true that the "Kiss me, Love me, Hate me, Kill me." did come up like a whisper almost in the back ground. after a few sentences I didn't notice them there yet they were still being said in a chant or foretelling chant. I loved the way it flowed into my mind and I actually did get a story of an actual doll being played with and tugged every which direction. Beautiful lines of poetry and influence on the topic.

Great work like usual.
I can only expect this wonder from you and your beautiful mind.
see you soon........

[Mistral Bilgera]

i'm wondering... is this about slaves? or an abused person who still loves unrequittedly? eitherway, still a good piece. =)