I like this one...I actually have a (possibly bad) habit of only reviewing poetry I like....
Simple, vague and easy to follow...like, in my opinion, all good poems are.
"Hello my dear one,
Squishing the sand between your toes,
Smiling blissfully at the water,
Forgetting your woes."
That's the line that took me for ransom. Allusions to peaceful scenes, especially natural(beaches, especially) and forgetting your woes always help calm the nerves...
Anyway, liked it...hope you don't kill yourself because I'd like to read more of your work.
The hopes of a parent to their child. As you said, a universal image. Nevertheless it is written very well and has a soft respective side to a loving instinct that makes it just as sweet as the words that are used. Fantastic piece.
I like this one...I actually have a (possibly bad) habit of only reviewing poetry I like....
Simple, vague and easy to follow...like, in my opinion, all good poems are.
"Hello my dear one,
Squishing the sand between your toes,
Smiling blissfully at the water,
Forgetting your woes."
That's the line that took me for ransom. Allusions to peaceful scenes, especially natural(beaches, especially) and forgetting your woes always help calm the nerves...
Anyway, liked it...hope you don't kill yourself because I'd like to read more of your work.
this made me feel very safe. i like how you keep it open to any intepretation, too. it really gave me a nice feeling inside...a safe, comforiting feeling
haha yeah I wasn't sure which it was, parent, lover, but didn't think of Angel. I guess Angel would be the only one to fulfill each and every one and still have a healthy relationship.
Beautiful piece, full of hope. Thank you for sharing. :D
From my point of view, it's like saying those lines to your own child, you know? But, it doesn't matter how we all see it, as long as you leave everything out in the open, making the readers guessing on how they'd like the writing goes...
This was beautiful! It encompasses the whole of all those that would shelter and protect those that are still young and can't protect themselves.
Even God, could be placed into this discription.
This flowed well and gives me hope!
Great Write!
This is a pure work, simple and plain. I envision a parent watching their child play and thsi poem expresses their wishes for that child. Nicely done, now welcome back!
My name is Niki and I'm 25 years old.
I'm from a small town in northern California and I'm not really sure if writing is my thing but I've done a lot of writing in the past. I first posted on this s.. more..