AN UNREVIEWED POETRY...

It's a Saturday night

& he's working late.

Its okay...

because he says he loves me.

he returns home tired,

& opens the bedroom door,

I'm lying on the bed

with lots of pain in my head.

He unbuttons his shirt,

takes off his tie

I get up to help..

He holds me by my waist,

pulls me towards his body,

I say 'NO'...

I had cramps in my stomach,

"I'm sorry for having my periods"

on A SATURDAY NIGHT'!

I whispered into his ears

the state my body was in.

he laughed it off!

He pushed me onto 

the bed & jumped on me,

as if making love to him

wasn't an option

but an obligation...

& he slept early that night,

I didn't...

because it hurt...

But love hurts right?

the next mornin' he wants tea in bed,

I request him to make it,

But he says no...

so I made the tea...

Because that's also what

love is about-

right?

understanding when your partner 

says NO...

But yesterday night

my 'NO' had mattered less...

Nights pass into oblivion,

In the daylight his servant

& in the moonlight his wine,

I am.....

There  I am left to decay

like a crumpled paper-cup...

like a house of cards

one blow from caving in;

he robbed me off myself....

& left me to pass away 

unnoticed

into an eternal silence...!

Reviews

[barleygirl]

WOW! This is so intense, but it reads like a pretty little story. The contrast between what you’re describing & the tone of how it’s being said – this is genius! Clearly this narrator is chafing at being treated so badly, but the words go on saying what we’re expected to say in such situations. I love the way you use the most womanly of all symbols – monthly bleeding – as your opening stab. It really cuts deep the way you put everything. I’m still shuddering to remember some of the oafs I’ve known & put up with. I think we hate ourselves for complying more than we hate them for being jerks & your poem is a vivid word painting of exactly that (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[NEHA]

thanks...
glad you found it worth of praises!
#HugsBack
#cheers

[justread]

well, this is just amazing!
though I'm here just to read, I found this piece so simple and powerful!

[Prynka]

What a powerful writing Neha. I guess anyone in this world can relate to your words. He robbed me of myself so true... We women are very forgiving. Forgive as much as you can but always have a limit, i wish we set our limits and abide with them.

[NEHA]

Thank you...I am glad that you found my writing worth of praises...
Keep reading..B-)

[Coyote Poetry]

It is sad what we do to each other. We slowly steal away from a love, once sweet, to a place of hell. The story written. About a woman, becoming forgotten and having permanent wounds. A sad ending to the powerful and well written story Neha.
Coyote

[NEHA]

Thanks my friend!
Lucky to have you as a critic ;))
Keep reading!

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure my friend and you are welcome.

[Lost_Soul]

OH MY GOD! This is Amaze Balls, but it's also really sad. I can't believe this happened to this girl. This is a really good, intriguing poem.

[NEHA]

this happens to almost every woman, dear!
not just this girl...
anyways thanks for leaving a review!!!

[Lost_Soul]

You're welcome.

[sette]

that is abuse in every sense of the word and it can even be termed as rape the poem strongly describes the pain the emotional pain which is difficult to let go

[NEHA]

yeah you got it right...
a social issue that remains unaddressed even after so many witnesses!!

[sette]

yes totally true

[Paul Bell]

The brutal world of abuse.
Will it get any better, no?
If someone doesn't respect you.
Time to go.

[NEHA]

rightly said!

[Anastasia]

Wow. I don't know what to say, this poem felt so real. This is such a powerful poem, and what you wrote about is a problem that needs to be addressed worldwide. I'm speechless.

[NEHA]

a load is needed to be done about this world..but who does?!
they don't even care!
thanks for the appreciation!

[¿]

Expressed pain of millions today.
Though it's written from india but seen world wide.
Proud to have a friend like you Neha!!

[NEHA]

I'm truly glad to make you feel so, dear!
#cheers

[Shattered Rose]

Amazing poem. Very powerful. I look forward to reading more of your work.

[NEHA]

I'm grateful at your praise and I would really love if you read the other poems of mine!
#cheers

[Shattered Rose]

I will !!! :)

[NEHA]

i'll be glad to have you as a critic of my poemss!
;3