A Teen's Tale

This poem describes the jerks a teenager undergoes at every stage of life.

As I proceed through the trail of my life,

I come across its twitches and tangles.

I am not able to confide in anyone but a paper;

As Anne said that a paper is more patient

than people.

I cry, i weep out of stress-

Out of depression, i get clueless.

Yet i am having to stand up,

With dried tears but with sore eyelids-

They are sore with bad experiences and my heart 

A bit more sore with lessons.

I cry my day out to calm myself ,

in this world of 'do's 

I keep chanting like a prayer

"free me out of this cage"!

A thousand inspirational quotes flood my mind-

I do get moved but only for a while...

As my heart sprouts at every kink of this trail,

I'm having to pour in more lessons.

And when i find only my tears giving me company in the dark room,

And when i find myself being drowned into the darkness of a pillow 

Wet with my tears,

And when i lose my way through a labyrinth 

Of my own sad story,

And when i fail to boycott the bloody past and sail ahead,

I realize...... 

That I'm trapped into a maze;

'A land of mirage' -the teen age. 

I'm not writing for the readers to burst into tears,

I'm only writing to vacant a bit of space in my heart

To room the upcoming lessons......

Author's Note

Please put in your suggestions wholeheartedly to help me improve with my writing skills.

Reviews

[justread]

Well.this was a bit more depressing!Though very expressive!

[Lost_Soul]

I really love the way it's written. They way you put expression into the poem- the story itself. Like every memory, words are a story too. I love the story, and I understand the pain behind it. I have felt some of the same pain, experienced some of the same tragedies. I have to deal with those lessons too. I hope I can through those past lessons out to make room for more, just as said in the story.

[NEHA]

yeah... you got it right!
thank you for the appreciation!
#cheers

[Lost_Soul]

#hiphipharray

[Einstein Noodle]

i think there is a lot of passion expressed ...it comes through clearly ... i think there is a lot of potential in this poem and teen age voices are so very important .. i think you could trim this up a bit .. simple things like instead of "a paper"..just "paper" ... i like the alliteration in "twitches and tangles" and would have liked to read a few more in your poem ... i really like the metaphor of the dark room ..it holds much deeper thoughts and feelings ..lots of good stuff...i would edit and shorten it .. important voice my new found friend :)
E.

[NEHA]

thank you for being a critic of such note!
grateful to your appreciation too!
I'll keep in mind your advices next time I write a poem...
#cheers

[Einstein Noodle]

;)......................

[¿]

You've put all the things with a harmony though this is a poem that describes the will and woe from which mainly teens past from. It feels so nice to read such expressing heart poems!
May Almighty bless you and your turn your skills into absolute.

[NEHA]

thank you!
AND THANK YOU FOR YOUR WELL- WISHES

[θεά]

You've described depression for many. Those enduring and battling a crisis in their lives. All walls seem to close down on the victim and hope seems lost. Writings like this end up being cathartic and a glimmer of hope from real corners of life can be the panacea. Strong words for a universal emotion.

[NEHA]

thank you!

[NEHA]

so do you think my writings are up to the mark?
i'm asking because i am a new writer and i want to improve.