Thistles

An Iambic tetrameter poem.

Thistles

The mist diffuses in the air,
white molecules disperse around,
perchance two singing solitaire
unseen are in the dark surround.

Along the path new buds have grown,
this foggy landscape to adorn,
and propagate with names unknown
mid thistles' purple bloom and thorn.

The olive trees array in lines
and nightly birds their squalls becrow
reminders of the gulls in brines
the seaward routes, so, forego.

Unspoken stand the trees in dark,
their silence be my honored guest,
two stars above me smile and spark,
complaisant to a void request.

© 05-18-2015, G. Venetopoulos, All Rights Reserved
(Iambic tetrameter)

Author's Note

I am kindly asking the other members not to edit or revise (reorganize) my poem(s). Benevolent comments, though, are always welcome. Thank you.

Reviews

[DaughterNature]

Bravo! I always like it when someone chooses to write in form - I think forms are drastically underappreciated. I did have someone tell me a few years ago that, in modern poetry, people tend to like to read forms where the poet was able to stick to the rhythm without reorganizing/detouring from conventional sentence structure - just some food for thought.

I like where your poem is going. Some of the images stir deep emotions, but others are still a little vague.

Cheers!

[Georgios]

Viv Wade: Thank you, dear! :)

[Georgios]

DaughterNature: You also mentioned: "I think forms are drastically underappreciated" My question is "by whom?" I guess only by those who are not real poets or decent critics of poetry. Many smiles and, please, keep in mind that when you express generalizing opinions, you should always provide solid evidence to support your, up to then, strictly and solely personal point of view.
Could you also please explain the literary meaning of the expression "drastically underappreciated". The "three" words do not combine well, you know. In (metrical) verse or in prose. :)

[Georgios]

DaughterNature: I have just read the poem three more times to discover where it becomes "vague", as you have commented. I found nothing that would support such a characterization. It is a nicely written, impressionistic (metrical) verse that does not stir deep emotions, and does not become vague, either. As for the "food for thought" you have mentioned, I always cook my own, considering the fact I am among the best chefs in the world. Thank you. : )

[Viv Wade]

Your phrases paint a very beautiful picture. You have a real mastery of words. Thank you for sharing this!