Conquered

This pain drives into my chest. 

It pins me to the wall.

Falling to my knees I cry.

Crying out, “Dear God”.

Finally lost in my own emotions.

They have consumed me.

I’m drowning and too tired to swim.

The tears soak my shirt.

My eyes streaked black.

Paralyzed by the thought of failure.

The Demons I have fought.

Evil I pushed away.

It’s came back stronger.

I have no more fight left.

On the floor I lay.

In a puddle of defeat.

“Dear God, take me.”

Screaming till I can’t speak.

I have been conquered.

 

 

-Mysty Rayn

 

Reviews

[Wicahpi]

"In a puddle of defeat.

"Dear God, take me."

Screaming till I can't speak.

I have been conquered."

Boy, I have been there a few times in my life. This is truly a deep down in the pit kinda poem that grabs your heart and yanks it. I think if you've been there then it definately hits home, like knocking your funny bone. Muck!

Stand up and Fight back!

[Angelic Darkness]

I can really feel the emotions here, and probably we have all felt
like this. Thank you for the review...AD

[Sean M. Addams]

very deep and powerful piece ... great job on this one...............

[Michael X]

Such amazing, heartfelt and touching imagery and detail
the entire idea is delving and the pain felt is consuming.
Take care, Michael

[bluessadmood]

you do not say why is all this grief ,but you tell it so wonderfully ,so strongly,one will wonder why is all this,you say demons and evil you pushed away ,i will say one should never surrender to his weakness,one should always my dear ,no one will understand your fears better than you ,and no one can fight the battle within yourself better than you ,you words always gives me lots of thoughts ,inspiring,and wonderful

[FireAngel42029]

I love this I can relate to it so much it is great

[Bonnie]

Wow! I can relate to this kind of pain and anguish.

You powerfully captured the feelings. And the imagery is well done.

And the question then is whether we can recover from this moment and choose to find a more peaceful way to live life.

[Staci Brown]

you caught that horrid feeling straight on! been there twice and thankfully i ended up so pissed i refused to quit...

well crafted piece of human tragedy that too often results in the end of precious life.

Faerie Blessings!

--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)

[LadyLove]

Never admit defeat! This does show how you let your weakness be consumed by negative forces. But, that part of you that succumbs to them you need to throttle and scream at and tell it to stop being such a *****and let you have your chance for what you want before you don't have that chance anymore. Don't ever give up what is supposed to be yours because of any doubt that it could be. Again, I know of this, and I am an Amazon for happiness...for myself and the one I love. Be strong! Fight! You know what you want...go for it!!!

[Laura E. Aranda]

The best place to cry out to is written in your poem....the strong part of you knew exactly where to turn.