Take Me Away

Take Me Away

 

Take me away

Take me with you

Let’s start over

Somewhere new

 

Take our children

Let them run

Play together

Under the sun

 

Start or world

Where we both smile

Enjoy each other

Laugh for a while

 

We deserve this

We’ve waited so long

Why should we wait

We’ve been so strong

 

You complete my life

My spirit, my soul

You’ve filled my heart

Where it once had a hole

 

I miss you too much

With each days end

Another can’t pass

Without my best friend

 

 

            -Mysty Rayn

 

Reviews

[Save the Trees, Save th..]

wow this is really beautiful and moving. awesome!!!!!!

[John Stussy]

Wonderful poem to what must be a fantastic lover. This was a very touching poem, I enjoyed it. Hope I can experience something like that in the future.

[lots fo love ♥]

that was so touching. i loved it

[Angel's Lady]

Very touching tribute! How sweet this is...

[Karrar]

The simplicity of your words capture the intensity of your emotions beautifully. Very well written indeed. :)

[Deborah Shepard]

dreams love life loved it

[soulsearching]

I loved it we all have dreams and you have reached out and touch all of ours.

[Laura E. Aranda]

Before I start my review: I think U misspelled 'our' in the ninth line....maybe not...just check it and see.

Now, My review....All I have to say is WHY NOT
GO!!!
Quickly!

[T]

Beautiful heart prints, Mysty! Really touched me with this poem ... hugs

[Mr. Lopez]

I only found one spell error that i actually had to re- read the poem to catch, because it was so minor. Your poem has a nice rythmic flow to it that i enjoyed.

You complete my life

My spirit, my soul

You've filled my heart

Where it once had a hole

I thought that this stanza was touching and is well written as is. I also liked the short stanza structure. Very good work my friend.

Mr. Lopez