As A Woman
A Poem by
Mysty Rayn
As a child I grew silent
As a teen I grew darker
As a woman I grow stronger
© 2008 Mysty Rayn
Reviews
Wow, you say so much in so few words. Again, I can SO relate. Great tiny poem.
Posted 16 Years Ago
I notice you entered this poem in the haiku havoc contest. I like the poem, but as a haiku, I'm not sure that it fits the form. I may be wrong, but as far as I know there is only one way to write a haiku, and that is for line one to only have five syllables, the second line has seven, and the third has five.
As it stands, your first line has seven, as does your second line, and your third has eight syllables. You may want to rework this.
Don't misunderstand, I like the poem, and I think you are saying something impactful and meaningful, but as far as haiku form, you may want to rework it.
Posted 16 Years Ago
I notice you entered this poem in the haiku havoc contest. I like the poem, but as a haiku, I'm not sure that it fits the form. I may be wrong, but as far as I know there is only one way to write a haiku, and that is for line one to only have five syllables, the second line has seven, and the third has five.
As it stands, your first line has seven, as does your second line, and your third has eight syllables. You may want to rework this.
Don't misunderstand, I like the poem, and I think you are saying something impactful and meaningful, but as far as haiku form, you may want to rework it.
this is BRILLIANT!!! granted it's short but the emotions and experience shine thru your words! definitely going in my favs!
Faerie Blessings!
--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)
Posted 16 Years Ago
this is BRILLIANT!!! granted it's short but the emotions and experience shine thru your words! definitely going in my favs!
Faerie Blessings!
--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)
short but a good read! i like it!
laceyjane
Posted 16 Years Ago
short but a good read! i like it!
laceyjane
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I WISH IT WAS MORE . BUT THIS POEM IS TO THE POINT . NICE AND TRUE.
Posted 16 Years Ago
I WISH IT WAS MORE . BUT THIS POEM IS TO THE POINT . NICE AND TRUE.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I wasn't expecting it to be this short. I enjoyed it and it is almost haiku material....I can't wait to get to your other work. I want to read it all. Thanks for sharing
Posted 16 Years Ago
I wasn't expecting it to be this short. I enjoyed it and it is almost haiku material....I can't wait to get to your other work. I want to read it all. Thanks for sharing
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Short and sweet. Nice poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah
Posted 16 Years Ago
Short and sweet. Nice poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
This is beautiful and so simple :]
Posted 16 Years Ago
This is beautiful and so simple :]
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Added on August 1, 2008
Last Updated on August 3, 2008
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