Until Then

As I sit and ponder where we went wrong

My nights too short my days too long

 

I think of how we used to be

A family branching from our tree

 

Now a home of silent chill

We sedate out problems with a pill

 

Ignore each other as we pass

Pretending this charade will last

 

Resentment building with each remark

Our hearts decaying and growing dark

 

Hoping one day one of us will go

Until then, this is all we know

 

-Mysty Rayn

 

 

Reviews

[Imperfection]

I do not know how these words came to you.
The description is so excellent that one can feel the emotions in your words. It was quite difficult to go through this.

There are two many relationships that take off so smoothly that we develop high expectations from the future but not too many of them survive, let alone floursih. It is strange how indifferent we become to those who at one point of time might have meant the world to us.

Outstanding poem. Makes one think.

[MagiCrystal]

this is the best I have read from you so far... love it.. Magic

[The Spaniard]

the decay, sadness, denial, and medicating all brilliantly portrayed. like it a lot. I've been in too many of those silent homes.

[Staci Brown]

emotional moving piece of sadness. each experience we survive tho has a lesson there to be learned... well done, enjoyed the format.

Faerie Blessings!

--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)

[lots fo love ♥]

that was amazing. i loved it

[Rach]

o wow. its so beautiful. it rly captures deep emotions in simple rhymes. its a gud read.

[T]

The couplets add so much depth to this wonderfully written poem ... As sad as it is for many, Mysty, you penned it to perfection and captured the emotions! Wow! Great job! hugs

[Mr. Lopez]

This poem is so well put together that I found the experience of reading it an honor. I liked that it was short yet extremely powerful. The rythme was excellent , the heartfelt meaning close to home. Beautiful !!

Mr. Lopez

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

So sad yet beautifully penned. Brought back memories of my own home life long ago. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[universalove]

I SMILE WHEN I WAS READING YOUR POEM. MY FIRST WIFE WE END UP TRYING TO KILL EACH OTHER AFTER 23 YEARS. BUT LIFE GOES ON. AND U DO LEARN FROM YOUR MISTAKES. IT SHOULD MAKE U BE A BETTER PERSON. GOOD WRITE.

[Laura E. Aranda]

This is so sad. Crazy how behind so many warm house windows silence threatens all the occupents. This was a very somber piece. I can't say I liked it because it is all too real to me as I watch my parents and other elder families around me........