Cleaning up the Ashes

This is a continuation of Erren's, Rising out of the Ashes. I actually misinterpreted the meaning of the poem, but that's just like me, I do that all the time!

She was so cruel to such a beauty

took for granted what was hers.

She dropped you to the ground

shattering memories to forgotten words.

I saw you burning in the flame

the flame of love lost anew.

I understood the feeling of a heart breaking in two.

I mended and I tended

to wounds inside and out.

A perfect thing so tarnished

a horrid sight, no doubt.

I loved you like a sister

that's what you were to me.

You wanted that to be real,

and became obsessed with me.

All you ever wanted

was to be real like me!

But soon that loving want turned into

spite and jealousy.

I tried my best to let you be loved,

to be meek and gentle yet.

But your need was much too powerful

and you were trapped in the spindled net.

I held you close like I was first in line for death,

but know that no matter what is now

I won't stop loving you yet.

I'd given you love you'd never had

from that other and ones before.

But not so soon shall I close the one path yet

the caged heart's door.

I kissed your head with drifting eyes

and held you in my arms

it was then I felt you hug me back

much to my alarm.

I pushed you back, frightened as I was, for fear it wasn't you.

But my precious doll was long gone now,

nothing I could do.

"I thought I was your precious, your dear sweet-hearted doll."

I replied with only a simple phrase,

"But now I don't know you at all."

You came forth to touch me,

with a fiery hatred in your eyes,

But stepped back fast just for fear

that you'd become the girl you despise.

"My need was much too powerful,

I'm not myself anymore.

I can't feel what I ever was,

Why did you shelter me from my own storm?!"

I smiled as I thought just how naive you were,

not knowing good-hearted love.

"You never knew how much I wanted a doll

with a heart as light as a dove."

"I loved you because you were broken,

and I love you more because of your cracks.

Even though you're not perfect,

you have what other dolls lacked. "

"You listened as I spoke,

and formed opinions on your own.

You grew and fed on love,

and I didn't want you to be alone."

A smile on your face brightens my day,

even though I'm near gone.

But you stayed with me along the way,

As a ghost I'll follow you along.

Author's Note

Help with any kinds of mistakes.... Sorry Erren for the mess up!

Reviews

[Érenn]

You know I will say it again, you didn't mess up the poem. It's just how you interpreted and believe me if I took your interpretation into consideration and read this one, it makes a very very well written poem and believe me you have done a fine job. The imagery is vivid, the story is gripping and you have given a great conclusion ^^