Flame

An echo poem

 

The flame flickers in the night - light

Dancing to her lover's clutch - touch

Wind caressing gentle heat - sweet

Now draws kisses tenderly - free

Candle swaying in his breeze - tease

In his passionate embrace - chase

Drawing skyward burning glow - slow

Further than she might dare - beware

Take heed of the wind's desire - fire

If his breath should be too strong - gone

Reviews

[Helen Woodward]

LOL Sounds like a good night. This is very creative and fresh/different. There isn't much I can say about this except that it's a good poem...usually I'm a chatter box, but you did really well with this, I did find the font a little glaring, but that's probably just me and the fact that it's late here...
Helen :)

[Nickle]

huh...this was rlly interesting to read...you gave a lot of symbolism and personification...this was rlly passionate and u could picture the intimacy of the romance...nice poem :)

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I liked the style you wrote in. It is unique, like your writings are. It is a good poem. I think the lone words at the end are great.

[Michael X]

flame, i love you created this concept of glowing, romantical desire, the luminous
imagery sets the moonlight ambience, sesnually passionate, has subtle hypnotic
tone, the echoing flow effect really draws heart to ponder, every word is carefully
chosen to distinct character, with craftiness adds to the eloquent, consuming design,
expressed in essence to the meaning, spellbound loveliness, take care, mike

[Rose Moon]

I like the teasing tone overall and the element of danger at the end. We all know we shouldn't play with fire but boy it is alluring. I love it.

[Tania Leigh]

Different style....I like it :-)

[desertraven]

I really liked this style you chose. Very well done. I enjoyed this!
Sandra♥

[BrightEyes]

definitely a different style of poetry...which I find intriguing....I liked it very much. It does have a playful feel to it...and I love the last line...nicely done.


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[Just Manoosh]

This poem feels almost conversational, very cleverly done. A lovely simple piece. Mx

[Ricohard]

The extra-echo voice seems mischievious to the lines. It's feels like two voices!-I Love it