Bedtime

For Peyton

To bed to bed, little sleepyhead

Tomorrow another school day

Good night good night, now eyes shut tight

Let the stars carry you away

 

Hush now hush now, as night falls down

On the pillow of sleep rest your head

To dream to dream, upon silver moonbeam

Of magic and wonders unsaid

 

How sweet how sweet, you look as you sleep

With my love you are never alone

Soon wake soon wake, when this spell I break

And the sun lights the sky on his own

Reviews

[Nickle]

this was a rlly interesting poem...i love the last stanza...i feel like i can picture a mother whispering this to her child as they fall asleep...i was thinking though...maybe you could change "With my love you are never alone" to "my love you are never alone"...anways just a thought but another nice poem :)

[Jamie S.]

Awwww...I love this poem! I want to read this to my kids, nice work mom!! Cant wait to check out more of it.
-Jamie

[Fairy Tales]

very clever! i love this

[BrightEyes]

a lovely lullabye for little ones...brings to mind such classics like Goodnight Moon. a soothing rhythm to this one...love the simple rhyme scheme...excellent!

laura

[Michael X]

i love this poem, the form is creative, capturing soft tranquilness
that is subtle, hynotic, sweet and soothing, i could feel my thoughts
being carried away, as the imagery sets the heart adrift, a lulling
effect that reflects the essence of dreamy, take care, mike

[Ricohard]

Yeah nice. Great flow, Mystic.
Quite a mystical poem, i can now see why you are into fantasy.
Good job, keep them coming!

[Rose Moon]

A beautiful lullaby. Now compose a soft sweet melody and you are set.

It seems to follow the traditional lines of a lullaby and forms a lovely image of a mother's love and an innocent child. (aren't they all when sleeping!)

You could experiment into modern nursery rhymes.

Well done.

[Serge]

This was a very cute piece. I could picture a new born baby or a kindergartner on his night before the first school day. One of those pieces that you read and you can't help but smile. Although I think it would be a little better if its written in free verse. The rhymes seem a little pushed and take away from the poem itself a bit. Overall a delightfully sweet poem.