Labyrinth

I cry
Unbearably conscious
Of this life
And what's left behind.
I laugh
Hardly aware
Of this life
And what comes after all that is left behind.
I try
Stuck in the burdens
Of this life
And the indecisiveness in between.
I die
Perfectly alive
Leaving this life
With nothing lost, and nothing gained.

Reviews

[SleeplessVolcano]

Your words paint quite a dark picture, yet for so many, life is like that. A beautiful, dark poem.

[Philip Muls]

Hi Myriam,

Beautiful piece of work, I love it.

They say we all feel guilt about life unlived, about not having dared fully to take the plunge. To just let life be. I guess that is what you mean by 'the indecisiveness in between' ?

And yes, we are unbearably conscious of this life as our only life and at the same time, we are not aware, not in the moment.

I like it very much.

[Katrina]

Wow. This is a beautiful piece. It really paints the mystery of life and what comes after. You have a very dreamy voice. I dig it.

[Myriam]

Thank you!:)

[wordman]

nothing lost,nothing gained,but you gained a lot
love,life,poetry,friends

[Myriam]

Indeed. :)

[Yasmin]

Another poem of yours that is simple and quite brilliant...
I like the emotional roller coaster that you put us through and the change of your reaction in every stanza. flawless rhyme thats for sure
Well done

[Myriam]

Your reviews are probably the best I got so far. Thank you so much.

[Yasmin]

You are most welcomed

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[J Johnson III]

Enjoyed reading this. "I die, perfectly alive" are my favorite lines.

[Myriam]

Appreciated!

[Surya pradha]

very well written. your perception of life is dark. i appreciate your work.

[Myriam]

Thanks for stopping by.

[Rohnium]

Beautiful piece Myriam. A complex and sincere feeling presented in a brilliant play of words.

[Myriam]

Much appreciated! :)

[Jane Doe]

Your writing is beautiful. The last stanza is both chilling and moving. I love it!

[Myriam]

Thank you very much.