Labyrinth
A Poem by
Myriam
I cry
Unbearably conscious
Of this life
And what's left behind.
I laugh
Hardly aware
Of this life
And what comes after all that is left behind.
I try
Stuck in the burdens
Of this life
And the indecisiveness in between.
I die
Perfectly alive
Leaving this life
With nothing lost, and nothing gained.
© 2016 Myriam
Reviews
Your words paint quite a dark picture, yet for so many, life is like that. A beautiful, dark poem.
Posted 8 Years Ago
Hi Myriam,
Beautiful piece of work, I love it.
They say we all feel guilt about life unlived, about not having dared fully to take the plunge. To just let life be. I guess that is what you mean by 'the indecisiveness in between' ?
And yes, we are unbearably conscious of this life as our only life and at the same time, we are not aware, not in the moment.
I like it very much.
Posted 9 Years Ago
Hi Myriam,
Beautiful piece of work, I love it.
They say we all feel guilt about life unlived, about not having dared fully to take the plunge. To just let life be. I guess that is what you mean by 'the indecisiveness in between' ?
And yes, we are unbearably conscious of this life as our only life and at the same time, we are not aware, not in the moment.
I like it very much.
Wow. This is a beautiful piece. It really paints the mystery of life and what comes after. You have a very dreamy voice. I dig it.
Posted 9 Years Ago
Wow. This is a beautiful piece. It really paints the mystery of life and what comes after. You have a very dreamy voice. I dig it.
nothing lost,nothing gained,but you gained a lot
love,life,poetry,friends
Posted 9 Years Ago
nothing lost,nothing gained,but you gained a lot
love,life,poetry,friends
Another poem of yours that is simple and quite brilliant...
I like the emotional roller coaster that you put us through and the change of your reaction in every stanza. flawless rhyme thats for sure
Well done
Posted 10 Years Ago
Another poem of yours that is simple and quite brilliant...
I like the emotional roller coaster that you put us through and the change of your reaction in every stanza. flawless rhyme thats for sure
Well done
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10 Years Ago
Your reviews are probably the best I got so far. Thank you so much.
10 Years Ago
You are most welcomed
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Enjoyed reading this. "I die, perfectly alive" are my favorite lines.
Posted 10 Years Ago
Enjoyed reading this. "I die, perfectly alive" are my favorite lines.
10 Years Ago
Appreciated!
very well written. your perception of life is dark. i appreciate your work.
Posted 10 Years Ago
very well written. your perception of life is dark. i appreciate your work.
10 Years Ago
Thanks for stopping by.
Beautiful piece Myriam. A complex and sincere feeling presented in a brilliant play of words.
Posted 10 Years Ago
Beautiful piece Myriam. A complex and sincere feeling presented in a brilliant play of words.
10 Years Ago
Much appreciated! :)
Your writing is beautiful. The last stanza is both chilling and moving. I love it!
Posted 10 Years Ago
Your writing is beautiful. The last stanza is both chilling and moving. I love it!
10 Years Ago
Thank you very much.
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Added on October 5, 2014
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