Gargoyles

I view those pitiful humans walk past the streets

Their motionless feelings and they're only meat,

Meat that would only satisfy us,

The Gargoyles' wrath, no more mortal fuss.

Once I finish their flesh to bones

We sense the distant demonic tones.

Far off into the lands of "Hell",

one must accompany the daemons and tell,

tellings of those tales of mortal dwell,

We are all concerned to view their world,

so us in their world we love to stay,

happily watching the depressed and the gay.

Reviews

[Mizo4]

its an interesting poem, i like the idea of gargoyles watching us as meat. its good good use of imagery. ahaha i wanted a gargoyle in my room at one point lol never got round to it... a nagging paranoid voice in my head worried it would come to life!

[Alexander B. Kerri]

Yes, to I, it is absolutely queer and very much arousing to notice that a wonderfully crafted gargoyle would treat the very mortal's tension but would actually become consequential and ravishing to be viewing.

[Blissful Sin]

I absoulotly LOVE gargoyles!! I think this poem is fantastily written, I love everything about them. From the structure to its name, just amazing. I really did love your piece, it was wonders! :) 10/10

-Bliss

[Rogue]

I liked this and liked it a lot, please don't take what I say here in anything but a want to be helpful.
This has a wonderful gothic and surreal feeling to it. I was instantly transported to foggy, dim night time streets in London. Lovely that.
However, and I have noted your Author's note about "completing something quick". It feels that way. There are quite a few unnecessary repetitive words, that similes can be used for, that make it clunky. Spend some time with this one, Alexander. You have a wonderful premise and backdrop here. I think you can make something "good" into "great". :)

[Dean Kuch®]

C'mon, people! We've got a talent like Alexander here, and I am the first to review this eerie, ethereal poem? Go figure...

Wonderful job, Alex, filled with doom, dread and dark imagery. For a 'quickie', this was excellent. The B&W photo of the gargoyle atop that building was fantastic!

Great creepy poetry!

[Alexander B. Kerri]

Thank you kind sir.

[Dean Kuch®]

You are most welcome, Alexander!

[Alexander B. Kerri]

Not my sincere best work but I decided to complete something quick so I developed this.
June 26, 2013