I Got You

Just as the title says:)

From the moment you started reading this sentence, I got you.
I dug dull talons under your skin,
Urgently grabbed your spindly arms and shook you,
Rooting you into place.
One thing you should know is that I never let go.
Yes, you may peel your languid eyes away,
And feast them on pleasing sights
But deep down I will always be there.
Be it in your mind's eye,
In your whimsical dreams,
Or in your worst nightmare.
I can be a gentle embrace;
Soft words that draw you in.
Or I can be a terrifying sight;
A thousand pieces forming a gut-clenching image within.
If I want, I can leave you hanging.
For a day, or a minute, you slowly grasp onto the gossamer thread I spun,
Until finally you give in,
And pull yourself up into the spiderweb.
Yes, I am the very thing keeping that elusive voice in your mind leaping from word to word as you read this,
Nimbly navigating its way through a black forest set in a white land.
In other words, I'm the hook.
And if you're reading this last sentence, you'll know one thing:
I got you

Author's Note

I don't even know what got into me to write this! Please write a review if you think it was worth the 10 minutes I spent pulling it together:)

Reviews

[Olivia Marie]

I was definitely hooked. I loved the imagery, and the metaphor. I actually read this a couple times. Trying not to miss anything, it's absolutely amazing :)

[SomeoneSomewhere]

thank you!

[Persona]

So you're writing about trying to grab an audience's attention? That's something we all try to do and I love your comparisons to birds (talons) and spiders (spiderweb) and it's something a lot of us relate to. The thing is, how can I be shaky and rooted into place? Things like that contradict and kind of throw off your meanings. And tenses. "Spun" then to say "give in" which throws me off. Some things don't flow well as sentences "I can be a gentle embrace;
Soft words that draw you in." the second sentence would not be a sentence on its own and therefore a semi-colon is incoreectly used. Now, the reason I am writing so much for this is because I am bothered about your poem and I do see potential in it. Yes, this is worth a read and I just hope you can word things to flow better and then your poems will improve dramatically!

[Heather]

10 minutes? Wow I loved it, honestly loved it, you did get me, you had me completely from first word until last. Like a spider and what a fine web you did weave to capture me your audience. Great creative piece.

[SomeoneSomewhere]

Thanks so much!