Addiction of the Devil

Addiction of the Devil

A Poem by DeathByChoice

 

Let's play devil's advocate

Lips whisper

As screams seep through your veins

The quintessence of ecstasy.


Deep lust poisons the mind

The lips

The loins


Smokey love filters through.

A slaves bond

Bound skin tight

As though embraced by addiction.


Drowned in a bloody passion

Torn by ruthlessness

Of desire.

© 2010 DeathByChoice


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DeathByChoice
Anything and everything please?

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WOW i really get this its great its like its hard to put in to words what im trying to say

Posted 13 Years Ago


Your thoughts speak louder than your words. What do I mean? I am talking about what your meaning is. I see the temptation running all up and down your spine in this poem. The desire of lust and the lust of desires. It really speaks to me in a world of my own. Great job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very well written and deep poem. I liked this alot. I can really feel the emotion from it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


'As screams seep through your veins The quintessence of ecstasy.' Love these two lines, summing up the feelings raging through the stanzas and ripping apart your words in their passion and desire. The emotion is powerful raw and flows with a violence that makes it more powerful, really great, raw honest and real. Beautifully harrowing in its honesty.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Such a mesmerizing thing the devil is no? The curiosity of what fowls through his mind, an interest in his evil, a look into the hell. I dont beleve in him physcially, but metaphorically and you miss brought him to life that much more. Frightening...frightfully amazing. Absolutely loved it well done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


WOW Fantastic poem, I love how the poem is very vivd and the flow is genius. Excellent piece of writing, you're very talented :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


dark and deep! such an amazing poem

Posted 13 Years Ago


Your writing is good, but your subjects are dark. I can’t imagine that writing these things is very liberating, it almost feels more confining; like a bird escaping a cage only to discover it’s trapped in a house without windows. It’s true that life can be very dark sometimes, but not every night is starless, and every night is followed by morning light. I feel you’re drinking darkness and melancholy like alcohol and have become addicted.

I know what it feels like to become swallowed up in despair…someday I hope you write about breaking free from the darkness, I pray you find a window little bird.

LoneWolf

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

absolutely beautiful. Dark and disturbing, and a deep message.
My favorite line: As screams seep through your veins
Great job

Posted 13 Years Ago


heh...just like how i feel...

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Name: Megan Dorothy Age: 16 Sexual Orientation: Bisexual Religion: Atheist Classifications: Emotional. Dark. Doesn't always play well with others. Quiet. Bipolar. Imaginative. Secluded. Independan.. more..

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