Fallen Angel

People in abusive relationships that deserve so much more than what they get....

Butterfly blood

Stains the lips

Of Innocence

 

Flowing hair

Shining eyes

What Brilliance

 

Deathly pallor

Dry and cracked

Shattered Soul

 

Beaten down

On the floor

No Control

 

Perfection incarnate

Tears of gold

A Fallen Angel

 

Dealt the hand

Fight to the death

Existence So Baleful

 

Bane kisses

Deadly wishes

Nothing More Than Nights

 

A dime a dozen

A lover's lips

His Favorite Sights

 

Exceptional beauty

A heart capable of such wonders

Come to your rightful position

Next to the warmth of my heart

By the caress of my breath

The touch of my lips on your

In the embrace of my arms

To forever reside in your place

With me

My Fallen Angel.

Author's Note

Any thoughts would be awesome!

Reviews

[The Cute 1]

i love it

[Vin]

The emotion in this piece is amazing, very well described :)
The rhyme scheme was great and it generally flowed really well. Good job!

-Beth

[Krista]

Again very well done. You are a very good writer and so young still. I am enjoying your work so much.

[Sofia N]

I love this poem, is amazing, I love the flow in it and the story in it also. Awesome piece, keep it up :)

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

the last relationship i was in was an abusive one, he would treat me like if i was nothing:'( .. so i can relate with this one.

[topsyturvy]

Hmm. One word. "Breathtaking" -->Hope I spelled that correctly lol. This was a very awesome write. Deep and full of feeling and meaning. Just awesome :)

[Jasmarine]

Wow, very strong. It shows, almost, the anihilation [sp?] of an innocence within a person. Even though most people consider innocence to be about children, there's always innocence within every individual as they grow. It's just a draw as to whether it will be exploited or not. It almost seems that theres an insight to what this girl [I'm assuming it's a girl] is feeling in this abusive realtionship, but then her finding another person worth her time who accepts and understands the goodness within the girl and is able to bring out her good side. It's a very good piece, keep up the good work :)