Hello Mirror

some lyrics I just wrote- of losing oneself in society

There are so many different
Versions of me
Sketched,
Re-written
and drowning

That In the race
to be the best
I forgot myself

Well hello mirror
Will you tell me who I am?
Will my eyes realize
The outline to
My soul?
Hello teddy bear
Who's arms used to
Hold you near?
Tell me....
Tell me please...

There are so many different
Wishes I hold
Grand,
Glittering
and historic

That in the everyday
Rise and sleep
It seems impossible

Well hello mirror
Will you tell me who I am?
Will my eyes realize
The outline to
My soul?
Hello teddy bear
Who's arms used to
Hold you near?
Tell me....
Tell me please...

Mirror mirror on the wall
Fill me up with
What I forgot
Mirror mirror
Mirror mirror
I'm lost....

Author's Note

God how I wish there was a way to include the beat and notes I intend... of course, sheet music, but I can't read music so that's impossible. XD Or if I could only upload video, I'd record myself on webcam singing it. but oh well. I hope you get the point =]

Reviews

[Gheeneil]

The first stanza speaks so much truth.

We come out of the shell, wearing mask. Sadly, it's something we can't live without. True enough, we keep, not just one, but a lot. Now, who could tell which one was real? Perhaps, the mirror could.

[Constance-Outspoken]

I read a few of your pieces, and this one stands out to me. We are all lost, sometimes, and therefore anyone can identify with this poem.
My favorite lines here:
"There are so many different
Wishes I hold
Grand,
Glittering
and historic

That in the everyday
Rise and sleep
It seems impossible"

I wouldn't change anything about this poem, really. It has a great rhythmic flow, and the interruptions to flow add emphasis where it feels right. Excellent job. Write on!

[LeeLee Ryder]

Great opening, ES... Getting lost in society's perceptions can be
a daunting task but ultimately it's you that will find the way to
know who you really are.. And Hello MIrror mirrors just that!
I love the line "the outline to my soul?"
RISE AND SHINE!
LLR

[An owl on the moon]

Brillaint feel and flow... I can sense the anguish and pain... the haunting tones... the despair found in dark reflections and wonderings... This line just jumped out at me: "That In the race to be the best I forgot myself..." Such an amazing song.. truly!