Beauty Shattered

A little ditty about a rose

Winter blew a feathery kiss
Upon the plumage of one so fair
A carnation hue, yet darker still
Was echoed in the garden there.
    Where angel dust and specters meet
    To chill the air and rest their feet.

Winter, with her girlish charms,
Yet arcane in her gnarled wrists,
Did come upon the comely one,
Summoning those deathly mists.
    That swarm about the crowns of saints
    While bringing them to all that taints.

Winter curled her lips with pride
As frost made love to petals sweet.
Trading velvet for glassy robes -
Slowly splintering in defeat.
    Ending a crash with tinkling sighs
    Who could mourn the rose's demise?

Reviews

[Alessander]

Angel dust? u mean, the drug?lol kudos to the format and imagery - even tho the diction and content are arcane, the read is still musical and concrete enough to draw one in. If you haven't read Poeticpers on this site, I think you would like his stuff.

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Beautifully written, I specially liked the imagery used on every line and loved the poem's last lines. Great writing.

[Leech Wife]

Beautiful, yet left an indescribable chill. I like that. You have great skill in your writing, and a lot of passion shows. Well done indeed.

[Coyote Poetry]

Such power and strength in your words. I had to read it again. I like it all. Ending was very good.
Coyote

[bob, small b. aka invs]

your 'little ditty' shows a lot of skill. the rhythm and rhyme are done extremely well and enhance the poem nicely. too often rhyme is so obvious and forced that it distracts. this flows so well that the rhyme is simply a little added bonus at the end of some lines. beautifully done.

[Lexi]

Beautifully written. Loved the vocabulary used.

[An owl on the moon]

This is simply stunning, taking us into the depth and beauty of frosted winter... I love to look at winter gardens, seeing roses and such encased in icy glass... frozen in time... Your words bring it all alive to me!

[Autumn Pendragon]

This was wonderful. You got so much across in such a short poem. I like the way you split your stanzas and the indents on some of the lines. It makes them stand out and yet fit in perfectly. I love roses and I love winter so this poem was a joy to read. I like how you personified winter....very nice! I will be reading this again and again!

[Poeticpiers]

Beautiful simply beautiful in form and content