I Refuse

Feeling trapped, completely- and refusing to let myself be caught

 

 

 

You know,

Once, dreaming was my profession

And living, yeah, it was an obsession

The dust I’d kick up with my chucks

Was infused with passion and belief.

And the breaths I’d exhale after laughter

Would sparkle with life and inspiration.

And not to sound to cliché, but to quote a great-

I do know why the caged bird sings,

And the cage has only but appeared to me.

Yet here I am, frantically beating my wings

To keep all it is that I see,

So that I might still be able to breathe

To laugh

Or to dream.

 

You know,

Once, I thought this was the end

And I went running to every friend

Hoping to find some magic kind

Of phrase to free me from these bonds.

But one can only be captured like this

If they simply surrender.

And I, have never been one to raise

A white flag and welcome the end of days,

One to hug the enemy.

I’m the one who fights to be free-

I’ll throw the Molotov cocktail

And I’ll rally at the capital.

I will own this life of mine,

So that this caged bird still might shine.

Author's Note

blah~ I won't let myself quit writing.

Reviews

[M. Amphet Salt]

Metaphor-metaphor-metaphor...I helped you with grammer, so are you going to let me borrow some of these metaphors that pop up in your work, lol? JK. Anyways, I really felt this piece and I read it four times, singing it the last two. Yep, I am a singer in one of those new age pop-punk-new age grundge bands. It flows well and I have got a riff structure in my head for it. Maybe if I didn't mess with I'll email it to you. Redundant, I love the way the voice speaks natrually. The caged bird sings because it's so lonely.

Some grammer...(Suggestions)

I had some problems with how this line ends; it just gave me this huh feeling.

"And not to sound to clich�, but to quote a great-"

I would definately remove this comma as you have a line break and it really creates the same effect, Unless you wanted to replace it with a semi-colon and remove the "And" in the next line.

"I do know why the caged bird sings,"

Grammer wise the comma should be eliminated; however, the pause does add emotional effect and slows the pulse (flow) and keeps the voices sounding more bothered. If the comma was removed the voice would sound more angry.

"Yet here I am, frantically beating my wings"

It maybe a difference in style, but I feel the modifier in the metaphor is wrong

"Hoping to find some magic kind
Of phrase to free me from these bonds."

Here is my suggestion:

Hoping to find some kind of magic phrase
To free me from these bonds

The comma here:
"And I, have never been one to raise"

"Molotov Cocktail" is beautiful

Great write Aimee. I'm with you. They may hold me down, imprison me, lash, gash, and tax me, but they will never imprison my mind.

[Song of Mercy]

As a more down to earth kinda girl I found this to be an enjoyable read. I do not mind the work of reading, but at times the simple ability to peruse as I read and enjoy the flow is a pleasure. I enjoyed this very much. Thank you for sharing. Barb

[Bud]

Amen!!! Power to those who seek, fight for and defend freedom of our own! You are truly a refined poet...hands down! I really enjoy reading your enlightening work!

[Bran the Broken]

I like the various metaphors and images--simple yet strong, and written in such a convincing, open, earnest, honest manner, it got to me straight....I related, in my own ways. Good write.