GOOD's DEAF, BLIND AND MUTE

Hear, See and Speak naught of Evil

Hear naught of Evil,

His deceit becomes truth.

And possible, impossible.

Evil wins and You lose.

Evil whispers,

Good shouts.

Good’s a lake,

While Evil’s drought.

Though we crowd desp’rately.

Around Evil’s form.

Awaiting water to quench,

Throats parched and Conscience torn.

 

See naught of Evil.

Evil is a luster,

Reflecting weakly from Good,

Taunting the fools closer.

Yet Good is the Shining Sun,

Glaring right beside us.

Silent and despairing,

As we stupidly trust,

The Angel we don’t know.

The Evil we follow…

 

Speak naught of Evil.

His language surpasses cunning.

Overcomes all human intellect,

A fire the tongue keeps fanning.

Good is dialect,

Tritely comprehended.

A lingo once appreciated,

Evil has now

Mu…f…fled…

 

~M.Babu~

Author's Note

What’d you think? Forgive the almost non-existent rhyme scheme:) Thanks for reading.

Reviews

[SINDE]

I think you nailed it. The imagery and diction were in your grasp plus the depth of this piece can't be overlooked. Nice work man.
Good is dialect
Tritely comprehended
A lingo once appreciated
Evil has now
Mu...f...led:)
I don't know if my comprehension is right. Nevertheless, I love it.

[TL Boehm]

Nothing wrong with the rhyme scheme in this piece - its sprinkled nicely throughout. I found it resonant and truthful. We do follow evil. It is what it is.

[realmwriter]

I think this piece speeks more loudly than the silance that has befallen my deffand ears, blinded me more absolutly than my darkned eyes and silanced me more than the muted phrases that refuse to leap themselves from my dying pen. This is supurb and needs no Rhym Scheme. Very Well Done Friend...!

[cartera]

Mmm. Not really my cup of tea: I thought it a little preachy. Is Evil really muffled (liked the way you spelled that out). But there is enough there to show you can handle words, and that is all you need. forget Rhyme schemes unless you choose to write a poem in one. Think rhythm: think: what syllables, vocables do I choose to maintain - or even break - this rhythm?
ATB
Alex.

[Jeremy Baker]

Intriguing - a very elusive portrait of the inisible made clear.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Brilliantly stated.

[Broken Melody]

It doesnt need a rhyme scheme. Its good the way it is. Be confident in what you write. I like the topic of choice and how you choose to describe it.

[Dayran]

Its an old adage that says you can't have good without evil. They are like two sides of a coin. Yet, goodness cannot be taken for granted, one has to understand and preserve the good with acts that exemplify such goodness. As a statement that the young find it hard to distinguish good and evil in our society today - that is worrying! A poem that asks again the basic questions in life.

[Murtuza]

This is such an impressive piece. The language is elegant and each line is so profound in its sense of meaning. The comparison between good and evil - classic and very interesting.

Very well described and the rhyme scheme doesn't affect the epic appeal of the poem at all. As always, you never fail to impress. Great job and an even greater read.

:)

[Nastia]

the rhym scheme is not even needed its perfect as is u hit the nail right on the head as the saying goes. u tell a story of all we do without even knowing we do it, i love

[Raven Starhawk]

It is good even without rhyme. It has its own cadence and sells itself. Truly a priceless poem.