LOST IN THE MOMENT

The piano lulling.

The ship swaying.

A soft breeze whistling.

The crimson sun setting.

I’m staring.

At the stairs,

You’re descending.

Your black hair, flowing.

Your red dress fluttering…

In your wake.

You’re stunning.

You look gorgeous.

Just smiling.

Glancing…

Across the room. Searching.

Our eyes lock…momentarily.

The piano keys, urging.

Egging us on.

The hold overpowering,

Our senses.

Intellect…shattering.

Your full lips, almost calling.

My name.

 

In my tux,

My pulse is racing.

My anticipation, rising.

As you start walking.

Gracefully…

Almost gliding.

The crowd around us, chattering.

I can’t hear them…

Our hands meet…playfully.

We’re dancing.

Across the floor…strutting.

Your beautiful skin, distracting…

Your scent, confusing…

Your gaze unfaltering.

Our rhythm, synchronizing.

The pace, proliferating.

The crowd, watching.

Us, rotating…

Smoothly, dancing.

You shut your eyes,

Beaming.

I shut mine too then…

Tapping.

On my shoulder.

 

Your fiancé,

Grinning.

You two, hugging.

Embracing…

The love between you-

Oozing.

Effortlessly.

I’m a third wheel.

Bowing…

I take my leave.

Envying,

My best friend.

You’re both,

Laughing.

The music, culminating.

The crowd, clapping.

I join in too.

Now,

You’re both, whispering.

 

I’m staring.

At the stairs,

You’re ascending.

Your black hair, flowing.

Your red dress fluttering…

In your wake.

You’re stunning.

And I’m a fool…

Lost in the Moment.

 

~M.Babu

Author's Note

I don’t normally write this way, but I was in some trance (listening to Bob Acri) when I wrote this. It really hurts liking something you know you can’t have. Feelings don’t go away and living in the moment sometimes feels like the only option.

Please let me know what you think…Thanks.

Reviews

[Parachutes and Sunshine]

This is such a great poem. It was extremely easy to visualize, almost like a movie in my head, or like a music video possibly. But you did a good job of making your audience (me) connect with your character in such a short amount of time. By the end, when we discovered she was engaged, I wanted it not to be true, for her to be with you. And it made me feel for you. So overall, a fantastic piece of writing!

[hopelove]

like my life in words you pretty good mikey

[Maureen Mwaniki]

This is so...unlike you!but its beautiful Mwach!i was lost in it...and this is about to stop being a review and become me buttering you up!so i'l stop at beautiful:)

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

That moment can be the most valuable one we treasure, like the moment in Titanic when they see each other for the first time. Excellent my friend.

[Kaygexx]

This was absolutely amazing. I loved it, and it made me smile because LostInTheMoment. is my username, thinger. (: Excellently done.

[Joshua J. Certain]

This was wonderfully done, not only do you take the reader on an adventure, you take them through an adventure of thought and emotion beautiful piece you have here

[Ruth]

This is fantastic writing...emotive and beautifully yearnful! I can literally feel the aching within this!
Perfect!
xx

[Fontane Wong]

Every single words, verbs, nouns, adjectives...are all amazing. I thought I was in my fascinating dream. The image is so clear. THe words are yet strong and powerful. Another oustanding one from you.

[Sukriti Suki]

I read this like I was dreaming. I loved the imagery and the single words and the verbs and adjectives...it all comes together for me....we always what the most what we can't have..magnificent.