DAREDEVIL’s FINALE

Find and tightly grasp your desires while you still have time.

From chains underwater to gravity on the surface,

He defied all the odds with great ease and deft pace.

With a knee-shaking smile and a fan base to envy,

The Daredevil had it all lest one thing he couldn’t ferry.

 

She’d chased him for years,

Before she was done trying.

He felt it in his heart, that her love had wrong timing.

He’d not conquered the world yet,

Brought it down onto its knees.

Circumnavigate the globe, sail across the seven seas.

 

His rejection of her love had aged to unbridled regret.

Which thawed at his gut interminably,

Guilting sentimental debt.

 

He’d jumped from planes, dived through fire,

Drove into pits packed with barbed wire.

But this last trick required a skill,

The type he didn’t innately possess.

Stealing hearts was one a deed;

One needing acute prowess.

 

He planned it well to the last detail,

Meticulous and cunning was his nature.

He was born to win, and never to fail

He was a pirate and the lass his treasure!

 

His helmet on,

parachute strapped,

He looked warily at the sky below him.

Caution and adeptness

alone’d

necessitate survival of t’prevailing peril.

Goggles on, smirking wildly

He approaches the edge

of the airplane cabin.

Then away he dives, concentration-marred

Seeking his final invaluable trophy.

 

-M.Babu- 

Author's Note

I’m really loving this loose method of poetry storytelling. I think I’ve put a message in here for you…I hope it’s understandable? As usual give me your honest thoughts on the piece. Too Long? Nice Flow? Bad Wording? Loose structure? Please don’t be shy…the review is yours to manipulate.

Reviews

[Maureen Mwaniki]

Ati please dont be shy!your inviting alot!!:-P
seriously now...
It has a natural flow to it,like am reading a story but am certain its a poem and am s'posd to draw moral from the story but i know its just a poem whose meaning is simple yet with alot of depth!see,even if it was longer it wouldnt have occured to me,it has a way of holding you captive and it plays out like a film in my head so nicely!i dont think there's anythng i dont like about it so no critique form me!:)

[jay-lyse]

I liked how it flowed but at the same time it didn't lose it's depth and structure. I also enjoyed the message it held, even though you didn't just come out and write the message curved around each stanza and developed into each word. Life can be exciting and surprising but love can happen when you least expect it to. And once you feel just a little bit of it something inside you just craves for some more.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Sheer hope to all that is deliberate and sought after, a mournful look to the things we covet and the things we assume, well done great read.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

I liked it well done I enjoyed reading this

[CookieMonster♥&h..]

i really luvv dis:)

[lifesmith]

certainly not too long...and the prose/poetry style of writing...so very well executed.
"From chains underwater to gravity on the surface" hehe, sijui niseme...

[Awkward]

For the most part this poem flows very well, thank you for sharing.

[Murtuza]

I really enjoyed this piece. There is a good pattern that you follow and the story you've told is quite an adventurous one!
This is a great piece Mike, I really liked it :)

[Judy Ponceby]

Flows very well for the most part. I found "thawed at his gut" a problem for me when reading it. Unless you meant "gnawed". I really enjoyed the story and thought it well done.

i really like the flow of this poem. its hard to write a whole story through poetry with this kind of fluidity, but you aced it man. nice one. keep writing :)

[Bryan Micheni]

:) me likey... Falls into my top 10 of this year, easy