Haikus are haard!kwanza if u take seriously the 5-7-5 syllable rule!this is an interesting read,i wuldnt say 2 short;i havent yet seen a long one!and considering most haikus ths days are just a collection of words and dont realy make sens ths 1 does make sens!unspoken words do say the most somteimes!i like it,keep trying your hand writing haikus!
The forsaken tides, I like that final line. I really like the format used, the words lean to the left. Those rhymes really make this flow, I didn't even notice the rhyming scheme at first. Well done.
Haikus are easy.
But sometimes they don't make sense.
Refrigerator.
-- Who Knows Who Wrote This?
Hahaha, no, you're quite right. It's difficult to write a good haiku and make sure that it makes sense at the same time. However, you seemed to manage it quite alright. Maybe you could make a compilation of Haikus to build it into one big poem? That's what I would end up doing, although I don't really write poetry. Anyways, good job, and nice word choice.
Are you allowed to use commas in Haikus...? Just an afterthought.
This is really great! My first attempt at Haiku was way worse, if it makes you feel better!
A nice message given, words unspoken really say the most! It's so true!
Nicely done!
I like it...theres a certain mystery, that whole quality of unfinishedness that makes one reread it...well chosen words,and a great haiku all round - a successful experiment!
Haikus are haard!kwanza if u take seriously the 5-7-5 syllable rule!this is an interesting read,i wuldnt say 2 short;i havent yet seen a long one!and considering most haikus ths days are just a collection of words and dont realy make sens ths 1 does make sens!unspoken words do say the most somteimes!i like it,keep trying your hand writing haikus!
I agree with you, Haikus are for me difficult.
For your first one I think it is good.
Words unspoken do sometimes say the most..
second line i really like .. forsaken tides do damage.
You wrote this well.