THE POLITICIAN

Extremely mild political ramblings

His voice louder than fireworks on New Years,

He barraged orders up and down the hall,

No respect at all for anyone, especially his peers,

Truly a Politician, as arrogant as he was tall.

 

His shoes polished, as a valedictorian speech,

He ordered anything he so pleased,

The Tax Payers’ money dug his holiday ditch,

Truly a Politician, as imperial as he wished.

 

His stomach spilling over his trousers,

He made way everywhere he went,

Respect and fear turning others to cowards,

Truly a Politician, as straight as he was bent.

 

His sly words echoing during his campaign year,

He comes once in five years to appease,

Building hospitals and schools far and near,

Truly a Politician, as slick as grease.

 

                                  -M.Babu-

Author's Note

Scratching on a notepad (little inspiration) so please don't mind the broken pattern. Review these ramblings and give feedback on how you feel!

Reviews

[jon cass]

well done, mano.
"straight as he was bent."
slick.

i hear a voice in here of a politician, actually.
it almost bites without biting.
insults without being horribly mean.

it's got a soft-spoken touch which is rad.
and that's a good approach,
especially when everyone else is just screaming.

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words are true. Election year the politicians will promise the world to everyone for their vote. Few honest politicians. Take a lot of money to run for office. Few poor men are the leader of this world unless a revolution of a sort. I believe we need business and accountant to be our leader. Men who know how to balance a budget and use common sense. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Quinn Blackburn]

well captured! wonderful wordcrafting, I love some of the images you've woven here... "His voice louder than fireworks on New Years," "His shoes polished, as a valedictorian speech," and of course "as straight as he was bent". good work!

[Brook]

I think Jon pretty much summed it up. I can't really think of anything to add to that review. Well-done. 95/100.

[Tate Morgan]

slick as grease lol oh yeah and bought and paid for too very nice

[Marie Harrison]

I love it. I can see him now in my head. Great imagery.

[Maureen Mwaniki]

Gr8 work here!!if ths is wot u call sketching then u shld do it all the tym!some gr8 lines in thea 2,'as str8 as he was bent,shoes as polished as a valedictorian's speech' not only did it remind me of the arrogance in political scene here in kenya,i have a few marching in my living room(in my head of course:-P)!!really gr8 work!

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

haha! Ati louder than fireworks on New Years? LOL
succint portarait of our politicians...watch out,this the kind of ish that cud get you assassinated lol...
"His shoes polished, as a valedictorian speech"
brilliant...you're growing bro! keep at it!

[Peter Joseph Swanson]

That was fun!

[SINDE]

I like the ending, the diction and as surely as the politician is slick as grease,your piece misses not a beat in bringing out the politician's character and way of life.The rhyme pattern is alright.