Drowned

Submerge to not to emerge.

I am so drowned into you.

Shutting out the reality on the surface ,
I am so drowned into you.
Unfeeling the insignificant sounds in air.
I am so drowned into you.

You embrace me like the water pressure.
A tight loving hug one can’t measure.
Every attribute of me can feel you around.
The gushes of your musings are inbound.

I am relieved of all my remorse and fear.
Breathing you as my new atmosphere.
Emerging out of you makes me choke.
Giving the feeling that can’t be spoke.

If that’s what’s its like, I’d rather remain drowned
Where I choose to swirl under the fluid ground.
And remain there until my time is due.
This is how much I am drowned into you.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I’m not a big fan of repeated lines, so I was glad when you only repeated thru the first stanza, then took a more varied direction. I’m also not a fan of messages about being “one” with another – as I believe in a healthy amount of independence to be a more balanced approach to love & relationships. Despite my not agreeing with your message, tho, I’m very happy that you state this point of view in an artful & creative way. You start with the “drowning” metaphor, then you stretch it into every possible direction, to get lots of different meanings & impressions. So, this is excellent writing & I don’t recommend taking this submerged path to love, even if you do make it sound tempting (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Mustafa Merchant]

Some time you don’t choose the path. The path chooses you. Thanks you reading. Deeply aapriciated.

[barleygirl]

Good one! *wink! wink!*

[Najam Us Saher]

Wow. What an expression!
Very passionate and descriptive. I could feel the words.

[Mustafa Merchant]

Thank you there. I am glad I managed to get the feeling out.

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.