I Wonder...

A really old piece I found in a notebook somewhere. Decided to post it anyway ha

Phone full of numbers,

Yet not a single person to call.

Room full of faces,

No real friends here at all.

Town full of bodies,

Yet not a single soul around.

City full of houses,

Yet, no home to be found.

I wonder when the time will come,

When the numbers will become people,

The faces into friends,

The bodies into souls,

And the houses into homes.

Reviews

[Jack Isaac]

Wow! The questions run so deep in this poem. A sign of the genius mind at work. Ummm --as Reading Music put it --speechless --nobody's ever wondered about this before. For those who say "ahead of your time" please disregard, keep moving forward with this talent, never surrender, and you will become the standard by which all others write.

[Lina Grey]

Beautiful poem! It puts into words how many feel when they are lonely, which is something no one really thinks about until it happens to them. I loved it. Thank you.

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

Very simple yet very touching.

[Amila Jay]

This is really good:)

A house doesn't mean it's a home... fond meaning to many people and touches them with the essence of memories and feelings. Reminds me of a song I was listening to not long ago, forgot the name of it though :/ eh.

Anyways, I like the form of the poem. It's really a job well-done, truly, and I like how everything in the first four stanza is brought all together for a finale in the last stanza. The only criticism here I can give is that in stanza 5, there seems to be two grammatical errors with "the" possibly meant to be "then"... silly error that a quick revise can fix ;)
Overall, really enjoyed this, gotta give it a 94/100.. Awesome work, and hope to hear more from ya ^_^

[Alewis]

really unique questions asked. another great write

[Marshal Gebbie]

It;'s all in the mind Mel...
On a given day... this seems to be.
On another... the whole world is your friend.
Human nature is mercurial..not odd...just mercurial.

[MetBySunlight]

This is quite true! My favourite part is, "City full of houses, Yet, no home to be found."

[Ronn Michael Salinas]

It's good. the way you handled the opposites. and the wistful last stanza, reminds me of my former utopian ideals...

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

so true...i love this poem

[patricia]

Some people go through life never even considering questions like these. I used to think they were the one's missing out. But I don't know...it's getting to the answers that trips me up. a great poem. Thankyou.