Dreaming of a Distant Land

Not sure how to describe it..it's about dreaming of a happier place.

As I take this pen in hand,

My heart is dreaming of a distant land.

A land of hope,

A land of wonder,

A land where darkness cannot plunder.

And as my heart so dreams,

My hand is busy drawing wings

So that I may one day fly

Before my withered heart does die

From all these secrets I have kept

And all the tears I have wept.

In this dreamland, there is no pain,

No secrets, lies, or love in vain.

Only hope,

Only love,

Only light, shining from above.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think?

Reviews

[Review]

Good. I think we all have a place like this. Somewhere...
the rhythm is off in a few spots, for example:

Only hope,
Only love,
Only light, shining from above.

there seems to be one too many syllables or something in the last line. I think it would flow better if it were "Only light from up above"
this is just me being picky. it really is a great poem.
Excellent work! Keep writing!
**Review**

[Becky C Strukamp]

Beautifully penned.

[Shy Girl]

I enjoyed this poem as well. It was very well written. Thank you :)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

An enjoyable read that is comforting and flow is great too :)

[nevermindfan1991]

This was simply beautiful. I have felt this way in many points in my life. I have wanted to escape to a distant land, where all my dreams come true, where everyone is kind, and love knows no bounds. I always felt I could create this world through writing. This poem was written quite beautifully and the I felt the structure flowed as well. I really enjoyed reading, it really brought me back. Great Job!

[Gaiamethod]

Actually I tend to disagree with the last review. I find the rhythm of the last sentence finishes the poem well. It completes it. I feel that if we focus on the feeling of the words and how they fit together is takes away the mental processing of what is the 'right' way and what is the 'wrong' way to write.
Your poem works very well for me and that maybe because you have a similar style to mine!