Dreaming of a Distant Land

Not sure how to describe it..it's about dreaming of a happier place.

As I take this pen in hand,

My heart is dreaming of a distant land.

A land of hope,

A land of wonder,

A land where darkness cannot plunder.

And as my heart so dreams,

My hand is busy drawing wings

So that I may one day fly

Before my withered heart does die

From all these secrets I have kept

And all the tears I have wept.

In this dreamland, there is no pain,

No secrets, lies, or love in vain.

Only hope,

Only love,

Only light, shining from above.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think?

Reviews

[Review]

Good. I think we all have a place like this. Somewhere...
the rhythm is off in a few spots, for example:

Only hope,
Only love,
Only light, shining from above.

there seems to be one too many syllables or something in the last line. I think it would flow better if it were "Only light from up above"
this is just me being picky. it really is a great poem.
Excellent work! Keep writing!
**Review**

[Brandi Nicole]

beautiful. we share this dream.

[Annie]

I definitely have a place like this. :) Awesome poem; I love the analogy to "drawing wings" and flying away. Great! :D

[Jack Isaac]

And we hope that land is not too distant --if only we shall look inside and dream. Nice!

[Cosmic Dreamer]

I have to agree, we all have places like that... very nice.

[Yellow Butterfly]

This is a really great poem, thank you for sharing

[EMF]

You're damn good. Such a beautiful poem and handled so well. Some may comment on the rhyming scheme, but, to be honest with you, as a casual reader I find it a wonderful piee to speak out loud. It lends itself perfectly t a graveld voice. Wonderful.

[Inyourshadow]

Heart doth die just a suggestion as this is a truely emotional poem allowing your feelings to flow as easy as the ink you pen with. I love the ending it pulls the whole piece together, loved it. Keep em' coming

[EMMIE]

THE RHYMING IS AWESOME, THE CONCEPT IS INTERESTING, AND I THINK WE AS POETS GO TO DISTANT LANDS IN OUR MINDS. I KNOW I DO. GOOD WORK

[Raven Starhawk]

It is creative for sure but more than that. It speaks to my soul.

[Dove]

This is a creative poem and I like it. Great job! Keep it up! This may not be the best review but this is a really good poem.