Dreaming of a Distant Land

Dreaming of a Distant Land

A Poem by MusicLove93
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Not sure how to describe it..it's about dreaming of a happier place.

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As I take this pen in hand,
My heart is dreaming of a distant land.
A land of hope,
A land of wonder,
A land where darkness cannot plunder.
And as my heart so dreams,
My hand is busy drawing wings
So that I may one day fly
Before my withered heart does die
From all these secrets I have kept
And all the tears I have wept.
In this dreamland, there is no pain,
No secrets, lies, or love in vain.
Only hope,
Only love,
Only light, shining from above.

© 2011 MusicLove93


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Good. I think we all have a place like this. Somewhere...
the rhythm is off in a few spots, for example:

Only hope,
Only love,
Only light, shining from above.

there seems to be one too many syllables or something in the last line. I think it would flow better if it were "Only light from up above"
this is just me being picky. it really is a great poem.
Excellent work! Keep writing!
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Posted 13 Years Ago


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beautiful. we share this dream.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I definitely have a place like this. :) Awesome poem; I love the analogy to "drawing wings" and flying away. Great! :D

Posted 13 Years Ago


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And we hope that land is not too distant --if only we shall look inside and dream. Nice!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I have to agree, we all have places like that... very nice.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a really great poem, thank you for sharing

Posted 13 Years Ago


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You're damn good. Such a beautiful poem and handled so well. Some may comment on the rhyming scheme, but, to be honest with you, as a casual reader I find it a wonderful piee to speak out loud. It lends itself perfectly t a graveld voice. Wonderful.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Heart doth die just a suggestion as this is a truely emotional poem allowing your feelings to flow as easy as the ink you pen with. I love the ending it pulls the whole piece together, loved it. Keep em' coming

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

THE RHYMING IS AWESOME, THE CONCEPT IS INTERESTING, AND I THINK WE AS POETS GO TO DISTANT LANDS IN OUR MINDS. I KNOW I DO. GOOD WORK

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It is creative for sure but more than that. It speaks to my soul.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a creative poem and I like it. Great job! Keep it up! This may not be the best review but this is a really good poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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