You

Found this on my computer. I write some depressing stuff..

You were the light in a darkened room

You were the sun on a gloomy day.

You were the earth on a fine, fine day.

You were my life, in every possible way.

 

You saw me at my worst,

And I've seen you at your best.

I guess I just wasn't good enough.

I guess I just didn't pass the test.

 

There was a time when I all I wanted was to call you mine.

There was a moment when I thought our love would last the test of time

There was a time when all I needed was the sound of your voice.

Then there was the moment that you made your choice.

 

With a single phrase, my heart stopped.

In a single second, my world was hushed.

It was our love you dropped;

And my heart that you crushed.

 

Author's Note

I'm sorry I'm so depressing..tell me what you think though!

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Ah depressing writes... I tend to enjoy them. They really bring out emotions in people. First off from the title, simple and nice. The first stanza, I love it, the imagery is so nice in it. The second stanza, here comes the more depressing words, I love how you described people. I like the feeling in the third stanza, bringing in the emotions and perhaps the cause of the depressing words. The feeling for another person. Possible correction: "There was a time when I all I wanted was to call you mine." Change it to: when all I wanted. It looks like you have a extra "I" used there. Nice ending emotions... good write. I really like the emotion brought into this write.

[kublakhan27]

A lot of people must endure this predicament but very few can articulate it this well...very nice job.

[Art Sun]

this is how everyone feels when they go through a relationship and then it falls apart... instantly...I wouldn't say depressing...just a release...nice work...

[Lily Mae]

This is the way to release the emotions that loss and sorrow hand to us..so never feel less then for having a depressed moment.. You deserve the anger, sorrow and time to vent to heal.. and until then there are people here who care...xo