You

Found this on my computer. I write some depressing stuff..

You were the light in a darkened room

You were the sun on a gloomy day.

You were the earth on a fine, fine day.

You were my life, in every possible way.

 

You saw me at my worst,

And I've seen you at your best.

I guess I just wasn't good enough.

I guess I just didn't pass the test.

 

There was a time when I all I wanted was to call you mine.

There was a moment when I thought our love would last the test of time

There was a time when all I needed was the sound of your voice.

Then there was the moment that you made your choice.

 

With a single phrase, my heart stopped.

In a single second, my world was hushed.

It was our love you dropped;

And my heart that you crushed.

 

Author's Note

I'm sorry I'm so depressing..tell me what you think though!

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Ah depressing writes... I tend to enjoy them. They really bring out emotions in people. First off from the title, simple and nice. The first stanza, I love it, the imagery is so nice in it. The second stanza, here comes the more depressing words, I love how you described people. I like the feeling in the third stanza, bringing in the emotions and perhaps the cause of the depressing words. The feeling for another person. Possible correction: "There was a time when I all I wanted was to call you mine." Change it to: when all I wanted. It looks like you have a extra "I" used there. Nice ending emotions... good write. I really like the emotion brought into this write.

[Me]

What a beautiful piece you have written here. I truly enjoyed reading it, and the imagery is fantastic.

[Stephen]

Love always put lovers in a situation or a word where they write such sorta beautiful miserable n marvelous stuffs.

[Barbara Walker]

A tale of lost love in rhyme and poetic flow. There may be many "lost love" poems, but this one is unique to you. It tells the heart's story well, but it's not maudlin. A very nice write!

[Adam Faison]

A depressing tone, but a great poem! I wrote a poem similar to this, but yours is quite better!

[AnoudQ]

Sad but Beautiful it touchs my heart and it's nice good luck girl!

[stars are far]

That was so nice ,, yet sad ..
well done :)

[Dayran]

Your words speak of a love that was only lost when it became a matter of possession. That I believe happens each time we do that. Create some space beyond your grasp and you'll see that its still yours.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. Love lead us to happiness and sadness. Good description described a emotional ride. A sad ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote