Echos

 

 

i lay here cold and curious

the world it stays so still

another night would be dangerous

but echos haunt me

high and shrill.

 

i'm burried in confusion

in a hole i dug too deep.

overflowing with echos and

my concionse still scares me.

scatching at the edges in this hole i dug so deep

wishing i knew answers to the echos screaming at me.

 

and still i lay here

so cold and oh so curious

while the world it lays so still

another night would be dangerous

with echos so high and shrill.

 

after all that we have been through

after all that could have been

your questions haunt my memories

a danger  deep within me.

 

within my heart

within my soul

within my mind so pained

within your whispers;

"I’ve lost you!"

now that i lie alone and

in the dark again.

 

and so here i am in the shallows of this hole.

so deep no light shines in

getting colder, a bigger danger to my soul.

a staircase reaches downward like the ending is so near

but a thousand steps i could still take and still

be walking clear

 

clear of end,

clear of calm

clear of sanity.

unlike the filtered clear waters;

my mind will never be filter clean.

 

after all the drama i dont know

what's true to my mind.

secrets fill in every corner

lies in all the gaps

your questions i dont want to answer

question me,

 much like they run a thousand laps.

but i know hope surrounds these questions

and dreams are made of hopes

to leave your questions unresponded  

leaves a hole within my heart

one hole i cannot revoke.

because you've made it so cold so dark.

                             March, 26, 2009

Reviews

[Thunderlyrics]

This was really good. I could feel the dispair of being in a hole, not being able to get out. What makes it worse, is that it is one that was dug by the person in it.

Very well thought out..your imagery was dead on!

[Alexander Z. Anthony]

=D
You've reall mastered inner thought and emotion! All of your works are filled with those two!
"my mind will never be filter clean." I think you meant "filtered clean"
Other than that, kudos! I like!

[Em North]

definitely needs some work done but w/e i thought i'd write it up anyways. any opinions on what i could change or how to reword anything would be really helpful.
em.