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I'm here to tell you a story, 

sing you a heartfelt song

of a girl lost and scared

who felt she didn't belong.

This young girl was unique

with a name of Stevie Rae,

long black hair with colored red ends,

and eyes blue like the clearest day.

Even though she looked different,

in truth she was a human with a heart

who was judged by appearance

which put more love into her art.

Armed with a rainbow and brush

she poured her emotions onto that easel,

all the while thinking and asking, 

why everyone treated her like such a weasel.

She did nothing wrong,

caused no one and nobody harm, 

yet the pain inflicted

was quite apparent on her arm.

Decked in black from head to foot

made the Jocks and preps

poke fun, call names, and hate everyday

because Stevie Rae was different, she had no depths.

Why couldn't they just sit back and relax?

Maybe if they talked they'd certainly see

how innocent and lovely she truly was 

and decide to leave her be.

She laughed at the thought of this

because deep in her heart she knew

that an idea like such

was just a dream that wasn't true.

People nowadays have such heavy hearts

everything said is mean and meant to hurt.

Nobody should say a thing

because everything said makes others feel like dirt.

Judging by looks is unfair

because it's not the outside that counts.

It's whats on the inside that defines a person,

not just pieces, but every ounce.

Stevie Rae went missing one day,

nobody noticed but her loved one.

Her mother was shocked 

and cried at the sight of what was done.

She found her in her room with a note,

"Lay me down, bury me with my art.

My words will finally be spoken,

those from the bottom of my heart.

All of you from school, 

have you figured out I'm done?

How do you all feel

knowing your bullying finally won?

This note is for you to see, 

hopefully you'll all realize,

the hurtful looks and unruly words

caused the pain that glazed my eyes.

Judge no more and welcome with open arms, 

then maybe my death won't be in vain.

Sorry mother, don't blame yourself

I never meant to cause you pain.

I must go now, I must leave.

I love you mother, good-bye."

Now fly, fly away little dove,

funny how words can cause someone to die.

Author's Note

This piece is for a contest at the university nearby. It is for 9-12 graders, and it has to be in ABCB meter. Please would you all tell me what you think?

Reviews

[Nobody.]

Really well done!
cheers!

[bluessadmood]

Oh Stevie rae,that was wonderful ,and sad how you decided one day not to show
and you were missing till were found with a note..bury me with my art..it will speak for me
You see all what you ve done..how words could bring the world to change
you drove me away ,wish you learn.then my leave will make a point
dont judge from the outside..look into every soul ,you may see wonders
i really loved your story ,its the way you told it.. it shocked me
lovely write ..

[Void Unspoken]

Oh my gosh! I loved this so much! I can't hardly believe all the emotions that I felt while I was reading this. I actually really took this poem to heart because this same thing actually happened in real life. I miss him a lot but I suppose his life was meant to tragically end so fast. So abruptly. Oh well... either way... you did a really good job on this. Mind if I show this to one of my friends? Sorry... I'm a person who tends to ask others for permission on sharing their works.

[Breanna Ragland]

i still think its amazing... lolz i love it!!!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I truly believe the the reason people like that get picked on is others are jealous that they have the will to be different and walk their own path so they have to try and knock em down to feel better... it has great rhyming and flow and the message is strong and powerful.

[Bridget Mcmaken]

Amazing sad work. It flows oh so well together. A lot was said in this... keep up the wonferful work. You really did a very nice job.
~Bridget~

[Short.Nerd]

You did an amazing job on this. It has a nice flow.

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Cassiopia

I think it's excellent, you stayed true to yourself, it's your style, it flows well. I think this has a great chance. You did an excellent job on this.

Regards,

Matthew

[De'Andre]

You have an amazing talent. The way you put words together is amazing. That was very well displayed here. I loved this poem and its story. Amazing job Cassi!

[Andrew Wright]

I feel happy to have been the one to hear this straight out of the gate! I've been anticipating your work for a long time, and my souls sighs with relief at the returning beauty. As always, Your ingenuity shines through, and I was captured throughout.