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I'm here to tell you a story, 

sing you a heartfelt song

of a girl lost and scared

who felt she didn't belong.

This young girl was unique

with a name of Stevie Rae,

long black hair with colored red ends,

and eyes blue like the clearest day.

Even though she looked different,

in truth she was a human with a heart

who was judged by appearance

which put more love into her art.

Armed with a rainbow and brush

she poured her emotions onto that easel,

all the while thinking and asking, 

why everyone treated her like such a weasel.

She did nothing wrong,

caused no one and nobody harm, 

yet the pain inflicted

was quite apparent on her arm.

Decked in black from head to foot

made the Jocks and preps

poke fun, call names, and hate everyday

because Stevie Rae was different, she had no depths.

Why couldn't they just sit back and relax?

Maybe if they talked they'd certainly see

how innocent and lovely she truly was 

and decide to leave her be.

She laughed at the thought of this

because deep in her heart she knew

that an idea like such

was just a dream that wasn't true.

People nowadays have such heavy hearts

everything said is mean and meant to hurt.

Nobody should say a thing

because everything said makes others feel like dirt.

Judging by looks is unfair

because it's not the outside that counts.

It's whats on the inside that defines a person,

not just pieces, but every ounce.

Stevie Rae went missing one day,

nobody noticed but her loved one.

Her mother was shocked 

and cried at the sight of what was done.

She found her in her room with a note,

"Lay me down, bury me with my art.

My words will finally be spoken,

those from the bottom of my heart.

All of you from school, 

have you figured out I'm done?

How do you all feel

knowing your bullying finally won?

This note is for you to see, 

hopefully you'll all realize,

the hurtful looks and unruly words

caused the pain that glazed my eyes.

Judge no more and welcome with open arms, 

then maybe my death won't be in vain.

Sorry mother, don't blame yourself

I never meant to cause you pain.

I must go now, I must leave.

I love you mother, good-bye."

Now fly, fly away little dove,

funny how words can cause someone to die.

Author's Note

This piece is for a contest at the university nearby. It is for 9-12 graders, and it has to be in ABCB meter. Please would you all tell me what you think?

Reviews

[Kawaiikitty96]

Such crafty and beautiful language! It's really touching too, and I can relate because I was once a cutter as a result of being bullied. But I've learned that people who mean you harm aren't worth thinking about :) you have lovely writing skills! Keep it up!

[joshua deathdealer]

I enjoyed this. Its well written and has a nice feel to it. Well done.

[Fabian Franco]

Very well done.

[Brett Forsythe]

Well written. You do a very good job!

[rainshadow]

'this is really good :D I liked the rhyming in it and i thought it was very well written. It gets the point across, bullying is wrong and i definately agree with that in this poem.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This story makes you not want to pick on anyone. You shouldn't make fun of people it's not right...because some people would do that to themselves...probably many people all over the world have thought about doing stuff like this before..and it's not always your fault...but some people could have tried to help stop it. I love the piece though. Very good. Thanks for sharing.

[al25]

This is really well written. Probably my favourite piece of writing on this website. It makes me feel bad for things I may have done in the past. Its the way highschool is but I hope I didnt make life hard for so many people in school. I really feel bad seeing that I may have caused people to feel this way. Im sorry. Anyway great write :)

[SimplyDisastrous]

This is my favorite of your writings by far. I really hope you win the contest, This piece had such raw emotion; you could feel the sadness dripping off every word. And the writing scheme is amazing, though it sounds off at some points. Excellent piece. You did a REALLY good job! (:

[Hush Hush]

Love it! (And if I'm not wrong...) I love House of Night books and love how you used Stevie Rae as the protagonist :)