He Smiles

It licks, surrounds quickly, gone.

Screaming and Crying,

she runs.

Panting and Heaving,

she falls.

Quickly and Shakily,

she rises.

Covered in vomit,

she slips.

Sweating and Bleeding,

she rolls.

Blistering and Oozing,

it traps.

Spreading unusually rapid,

she's frozen.

Surrounded and Licked,

she's enveloped.

Melting and Charred,

she's gone.

Fire happily killed,

He Smiles.

Author's Note

What do you think? It just came to me, I wrote it for a contest.

Reviews

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

Umm? not beautiful more like a very very dark piece But each to their own and Bold and Brave Piece very powerful piece. not sure what else to say on this God bless

[SimplyDisastrous]

Creepy. I honestly don't see how it's beautiful. I mean, it sounds like it's supposed to be a dark piece. But, eh, everyone has their own opinions. I liked it. You described how the character was feeling. But I'm not so sure I get it...

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

Omg! It's beautiful! I love it so much! ;p

Aw it has so muchgoing on and its written great! good job!

[Liza]

this read like a short story
there was so much said in this small write
left the imagination to run wild
and it is what an author should strive for
you have a nice style to your ways

[Cherrie Palmer]

this is a good format for such a short piece it keeps your eyes moving at a quick pace that matches the poem. Great job

[Dream Weaver]

Once my eyes adjusted, I read this and I must say,
very spicey hot...Well done :) no pun intended...

[FireFly15]

I really enjoyed reading this, excelent job.

100/100

[David W Moore III]

Hot!! Very nice build up of mystery (I didn't look at the photo first) revealing itself at the end. Brava.