Love's Gauze

Smile.

What are you waiting for?

Smile.

It's something you should do more.

Smile.

Life's a bright little star.

Smile.

You're here so close, never too far.

Smile.

Watch the static surge.

Smile.

While I stand on the verge.

Smile.

With all your pretty teeth.

Smile.

Before I forget to breath.

Smile.

Because your love's no lost cause.

Smile.

You've mended and wrapped my broken heart with...

Love's Gauze. 

Author's Note

Well, I saw the word smile and BAM. The poem just went off in my head, tell me what you think. (:

So to me this is from male perspective, can you see that?

Reviews

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Lunae,

I can with the help with the picture. I think however that really this could be taken from either perspective. This is one of those feel good love poems, and I must say I am not very good with the romance stuff. I do tend to get giggly around the pretty girls.

I think this a cute little number and it brought a smile to my face. Excellent work.

Always,

Matthew

[J. R.]

The repetition is a nice touch and adds to the sincere emotion on display here.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this was really good. I could see that it was from a male perspective. It was really sweet also because the guy wants to see the girl smile. She wants her to be happy which is a great thing. I love this though. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Cassie316]

This poems is cute =)
I like the rainbow letters too!! good effect haha
Honestly for some reason I really like the way this poem is written structure wise. Like before I even read it it gives off a happy vibe =)

This line made it hard for me to see it from a male perspective:
Smile.
Life's a bright little star.
I guess that line just strikes me as feminine, or something only a gay guy would say =)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I think it is a very endearing poem and the very essence of what being romantic is. Sorry it took so long to get to.

[Iris Jayne]

this is another great poem of yours, and i must agree that the colors added up. love means a lot, and your poem emits them one by one with every 'smile'. great job. SMILE! im rating it high. [:

[River Wilson]

I can see that, its great...really great.

[KL]

Finally something optimistic. :P This I can dig. Liked the use of colour, as it enhances the poetic mood. One thing I suggest though, as it seems you've limited yourself to always using a rhyme scheme... break away from it. Try writing a poem that doesn't have a scheme - not only will you realize you're not bound by certain words (meaning that you can only use words that rhyme with other words) you can say just about anything... aka pure, flowing poetry. Give it a shot.

[Tina Kline]

This is a really upbeat, positive and fantastic poem. Very beautiful and very happy. That's what smiling does!

[Snickers]

Awww this is beautiful, it was, amazing, keep it up hon.
Dream.

[Adelia Alighieri]

Aww, beautiful! Very vivacious. Great job!